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Full Breath, on Intake
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Full Breath, on Intake |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Full Breath [revised] On Intake “The human ego is a fragile thing, but I wouldn't say it unless I saw the potential in you to achieve it...” RCR…  It was then I took the fullest breath, to stay some tear from welling, as heartstrings were plucked quite tight, and this great love, it’s still swelling… how many times was this little boy the bane of my existence, how many times did I taunt his life, and oh, we were persistent for we were to be each other’s rock on which we would someday stand, though time and tide has ticked the clock I knew his secret was to have a band, though no one else might know this share, he knew mine…was to write on air… Oh, I might pound him on the arm, then he would parry forth in glee, we would wrestle, but no harm would come to my brother, nor me… but let no one else come in to this secret ring of taunt the memories are falling forth so fast… it’s strange how they still sing in haunt… and then I took the fullest breath for who knows when we shall see the face of each other again, hey, Robert…hey, Karilea… He lives on in streams and dreams I hear some gurgle and his behest to follow forward, and, it seems he holds me ever close to his chest but then he lets me loose to find my way and heeds that "back" I shall not see; he finds a course that I should stay and only in dreams shall he be. ~*~ Somehow, someway, his music lives on, even if it only reigns in this heart of me. ~*~ This write began on 3-9-03 Yet, I don’t feel it is finished, even now. ~*~ Tonight, on 2-05-08, I remember more than my brother, and I thank Ron, and Nan, for making our Remember place of peace. " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love ~*~ KRJ |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You have moved me deeper than tears. I, also, had a brother named Robert - and your poem speaks of a relationship that I have known. Our refrain was: Hey, Robby Hey, Liz I hear it still and I smile. Thank you, Karilea. Alison |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
A very touching poem. very beautiful. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Karilea... I'm sending you my hugs and prayers.. love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: It is a gift that he comes in dreams and you hear his music and feel him close. This is very very beautiful and poignant. I have seen the beautiful remembrance in that special place and I think it is really something that holds us deeply united. Love and hugs, Margherita  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh how I remember the times my brother and I wrestled what fun we had good memories in this piece |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"for we were to be each other’s rock on which we would someday stand" And still today you stand, upon that rock of Respect, and Love. *A keeper for my library. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Karilea, your poem moved me to go back into PiP's "Place of Peace". For those who have not visited it, I thought I would include his bio in my reply. God bless him ~ and you. Robert Charles Rilling (November 25, 1953-February 5, 2006) Fagin "PiPtalk Member" Arroyo Grande, California USA Robert joined PiPtalk on May 7, 2004. He began his life in Los Angeles, California, later growing into adulthood in Santa Maria, and spent his good times in San Luis Obispo and later in Arroyo Grande. He stayed “near the sea” where all life begins, Sissie. He had a child by his first wife, and in a second marriage, adopted his step-children who remained close to him at the end of his life. Relationships seemed difficult for him, because his first passion was, and remained to the end, his music. Before ill health overrode his musical dreams, Robert helped form a couple of bands, the last being, "The Official Undertow,"and he enjoyed the process of creating music and writing lyrics by melding minds and psyches. He worked in the computer field most of his adult life, before his illness kept him from moving on in life 24/7. He knew life could be made better, by extending an open palm, an open heart, and an open mind. He took those three things with him, and continues to play music to his heart’s content. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Sending prayers over! ARCTIC WIND |
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Bobby Jordan Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 491Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Sunshine, Very nice job on this. Brothers and sisters are always nice to have. Bobby |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear Sissie....time has memory for a reason. "though no one else might know this share, he knew mine…was to write on air…" He was right.  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
A sad and poignant poem that touches the heart but those happy memories are a things to treasure. So lovingly written Karilea. A big hug to you. Lindsay |
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Clang Member
since 2005-12-15
Posts 222 |
I am not always good at saying the right thing, but my heart goes out to you for your loss. It makes me want to go and hug my sis. This is a beautiful write. Thank you for sharing it with us. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Sending you a big . Sure hope it helps. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A most moving write but of course it is because one can know it comes from the heart that dreams and listens still to the music. I never knew my brothers the way you knew yours so you are indeed blessed to have such good memories. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"the memories are falling forth so fast… it’s strange how they still sing in haunt…" such a deep love Karilea so well spoken how can it ever be done? finished? Linda Angel, thank you for the bio |
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ilsm Member
since 2008-04-13
Posts 61UK |
I came here because you are my first contact in PIP, out of mild curiosity. I shall take away knowledge of someone who must have been a wonderful person, and of your sad loss too. (I could not write anything about my own sister's death, but Leonard Cohen's song, "Alexandra Leaving" serves as a reminder instead. As you will know, there is nothing on Earth more powerful than music and words.) This is a stunning elegy. Thank-you. ilsm |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thanks for sharing these words from your heart...James |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Thanks for reminding how precious is the relationships between a brother and a sister. I wish you the joy of your memories which you so eloquently penned in verse. This filled my heart with joy and sorrow. Thank you for sharing. sharyn |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a most grand-fine tribute, finished...or not?! |
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rad802 Member
since 2008-04-19
Posts 279KY U.S.A. |
It is hard to find tings like this that speak to me. I am glad I read this. Thanks Rick Delmonico |
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rad802 Member
since 2008-04-19
Posts 279KY U.S.A. |
in other words you have to read a lot of poems before you find one as wonderful as this one. Sorry for your loss. Rick Rick Delmonico |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
Sunshine, your love for your brother has brought me to tears… I can feel through your beautiful words how very deep and true your love for him is and always will be… He lives on in you and as long as you breathe his spirit and memory will be. Tammy<333 |
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Virtual Abyss Member
since 2008-04-09
Posts 52East Coast - USA |
Wow! Thank you for sharing! Having dealt with a great deal with death growing up, you've encapsulated life through love and thought provoking encouraging memories. A breath of fresh air! V/r, Virtual Abyss |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
a wonderful and touching poem from a very talented pen clever talks delay friendship! |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karilea...Robert will live on forever in your book of memories & your heart. Like you said the story is not finished as long as you have the will to live and dream & write...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
We never forget those who have touched us so deeply. Makes me wish my brother and I were more close (geographically) |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This write began on 3-9-03 Yet, I don’t feel it is finished, even now. I know this well, as I have one unfinished myself, and I suppose it always will be. |
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