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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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It’s a lonely road that you walk on, I bet The center line dotted with question marks that no map can decipher. One hand beckons you onward, one clings to hold you back. And in between is loneliness. I want to hold on to you and keep you here. My eyes show this deep longing then, again, they well with tears. We talk our goodbyes with urgency, each day counted, cherished. And tears water our eyes. Shhhh, you say, shhh, don’t cry; but sometimes I cry silently. Each sob stifled until resistance crumbles, another emotional battle lost. Each poem has you woven in it; your name whispers off my tongue. And I already miss you. I already miss you with intensity that hurts. I close my eyes and write poetry, thoughts flowing like those damn tears; my eyes are too tired to see. Now we talk about ‘when’ not ‘if’. And we cry together. Shhh, you say, shhh, don’t cry; but we still cry silently. --- Alison |
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Inspired-8 Member
since 2008-04-14
Posts 311Pluto |
Beautiful write ...the pain is so real and heartfelt. Inspired-8 |
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tnhness Junior Member
since 2008-04-14
Posts 15 |
the first stanza is wonderful! i love the road imagery. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
((((((hugs)))))) you my sweet Ali-girl.. glad you are still writing... I'm here for you... love RDB xx Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Touched by your poem, so emotional and close .... have a nice day yann |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, well done little one... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
(((huggsss)) Well done, Alison... I am here... |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Saying goodbye can be quite painful-but you express it well. Thank you sharyn |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Gosh Alison, you have me crying now too and I suppose for all the many people and things I've missed during the course of my life so far. I guess you did good here, gal, to make the reader feel the sadness of goodbye and to make them cry silently. I hope for you that the "when" is sooner than you think. Helen |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
A, Intensely beautiful, I just wanted to say we feel for you & are thinking of you.....J xx |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
While reading your poem my breath caught and my heart literally ached. If we didn't love with all our heart we wouldn't know these feelings you write of. And I felt your words deeply. |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
This is gorgeous Alison… so gently and lovingly written. Tammy<333 |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Alison, This is very good Hon. Try and remember though, crying doesn't pay, there's not much money in it. Bobby |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
All of you have touched me in ways that you may not realize. The kindness and support is amazing. Bobby, tears are healing too. I wish you all a good couple of weeks as I am going to be gone. If I can peek in, I will. With love, Alison |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
O, dear, O dear. How visceral, how aking, how deep is the longing here, how personal, how universal how easy to identify with it, it is for me. J |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Alison that is so good, A very poignant post, much enjoyed. Lindsay |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
obviously a very 'real,' heart-felt, personal, emotional 'write' of fine merit! serious applause!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Alison, your sadness is palpable and I could feel it deeply as I read your words that were emotionally charged. Sending a loving and compassionate hug, Linda   |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
And so close to you, you make me feel, How paradoxic that geography and circumstance would keep you so very far away ... Shhhhhhh conspiratorial whisper. I'm turning off all my hearing and FM sound equipment so that I can listen to the tidal rhythms, of your emptying and filling heart. Love, Jaime |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Your thoughts are beautiful but so very sad, Alison. My heart hurts for you and your words touch me deeply. I don't know want else to say. Ida |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Emotion filled Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
Alison! O, Alison! well okay did I already reply once maybe twice ... let's see. Ivery time I look at it makes me feel I am wit you. And can be with you anytime. That is the magic that transcends the tree barriers that so often keep us so painfuly apart. You jump through the hoops of Time Circumstance and Space, and know that someone somewhere loves me even if they can't be here in actual person. sorry in advanced if I decide I have to reply to this again! :---------) Spring is springing in the Arctic? Love Jaime |
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ilsm Member
since 2008-04-13
Posts 61UK |
All I can say is, this is beautiful. Thank-you. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you all. I still cry I miss him lots and as I go back tonight and read here I see how much people care He died and I cry. That's about it, I guess. |
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