Floor full of shattered mind

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Open Poetry #42

Floor full of shattered mind

poddarku
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since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-02-03 01:13 AM

Floor full of shattered mind

In an afternoon of untimely shower
Mind falls out of the benumbed fingers.
A winter of crazy white on the screen.
Bellow is an open road to jump,
An open letter to do away with
Life.
Unsilent moving picture of deep fatality
Flowers amid cold drops of water.

Far, so far you have gone, my wit
Far from my floor full of shattered mind.
I could have die out to prove boredom
I could love you instead,
But, I chose to sat in a heap
On a floor full of shattered mind.
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TomMark
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since 2007-07-27

Posts 2133
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1 posted 2008-02-03 01:33 AM

Perfect. Dear Poddarku. Another wonderful one.
love the expression
"Mind falls out of the benumbed fingers"
Thank you for sharing.

poddarku
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since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

2 posted 2008-02-03 01:44 AM

thank you.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2008-02-03 10:43 AM

quote:
I could love you instead,
But, I choose to sit in a heap
On a floor full of shattered mind

we always have a choice no doubt!

You did a great job. Powerful poem!

love
Margherita

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

4 posted 2008-02-03 11:45 AM

powerful poem!

ARCTIC WIND

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2008-02-03 02:43 PM

Opportunities, choices, moments...you reveal the importance of making choices we can live with...James

simon
Member

since 2008-01-14

Posts 440
London, England

6 posted 2008-02-03 03:10 PM

This is fascinating 'cause it's so short but there's so much here. Love the economy & love the poem...

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

7 posted 2008-02-04 09:56 AM

thank you all.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2008-03-10 11:09 AM

Looking for some of your poems to share
at tonight's writer's meeting...

This, and "Father, a salesman" will be
my choices.

Thank you!

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