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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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On this rainy night, I think of you wearing a long coat, your eyes like scattered drops of color on the floor of a thousand panes of glass, unshattered. Where were you when the last star and a slivered moon overwhelmed the tears of a thousand nights, then licked the first drop, like dew, as morning happened, again and again? A thousand miles blow past my window, leaving the scent of trees, left naked by the raking air of winters, as I find you, fragrant on my pillow in the dark of a dream, believing the dream I'm dreaming, is true. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Martie!!! How I had missed you! Hope things are better. You move me with your wonderful words here, to savor more than once, because they are first class poetry and because they hold incomparable beauty. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
Martie, Your poem is beautiful…I will be reading this one several times over… Tammy<333 |
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Seoulair Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807Seoul S.Korea |
wonderful!!! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Hey, Martie, Lovely poem from you, neighbor. Hope everything is okay with you. Ida |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I especially loved the sensation of dreaming you wove in this poem Marti. What a beautiful compliment, to changing seasons, in light and in life. Welcome home.  |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Nice work Martie.... John |
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Ocean Vuong Junior Member
since 2008-03-29
Posts 37NYC |
ahhh how I adore a solid piece, beautiful. great metaphor and diction here. bravo! -ocean |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's so good to see you writing again, Sissie... this has been a while in coming!  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Only you, Martie~ I've seriously missed reading your delightful poetry. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you for the replies to this poem...it was good to hear from you all. Bluesy...wonderful to see you again!!  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
the words continue to resonate after the read, strikingly sad in its beauty and beautiful in its sorrow |
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SkaaDee Member
since 2008-04-07
Posts 116Canada |
Some very nice imagery. nice poem. |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
tres bien, enjoyed muchly. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
A thousand miles blow past my window, leaving the scent of trees, left naked by the raking air of winters, as I find you, fragrant on my pillow in the dark of a dream, believing the dream I'm dreaming, is true Martie... sheer delight to read! love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I love the ending especially! applause!! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
superb Romanticism! A grand-fine image: “On this rainy night, I think of you wearing a long coat, your eyes like scattered drops of color…” Also wonderful: “the last star and a slivered moon overwhelmed the tears of a thousand nights” and: “A thousand miles blow past my window” very much applause of this 'penning!' |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Martie - Beautiful words beautifully strung together as always! How lovely to read you again! Love Helen |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Martie, it' the first time i read you, i surely will do it again, enjoyed it... best wishes yann |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
o.o <---- Face says it all, Excellent write. -Angel. |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
This is exceptional work. I love the novel way you create such vivid images. As in "Where were you when the last star and a slivered moon overwhelmed the tears of a thousand nights, then licked the first drop, like dew, as morning happened, again and again?" Spectacular!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for sharing sharyn |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
when dreaming dreams, it is so important to believe...i felt the sensitivity! |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Glad to see this interesting 'penning' back near the top of the "P.I.P.-land" queue! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"A thousand miles blow past my window, leaving the scent of trees, left naked by the raking air of winters" Oh, Martie, this is exquisite imagery! |
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