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Leaning Into The Wind
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Leaning Into The Wind |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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On sullen paths that lead to river's edge, here my burning bridges set in flames by crossing pain against the striking flint of time reflecting trails in fire's light, mine are but nameless footprints lost again in residue beneath debris, fragrant ashes born of grief, adrift on winds of change, winds that echo dying screams born of bloody memories lives and dreams sacrificed carelessly upon barren altars of belief. I saw god flying patiently right there next to me, she was looping lazy circles high up on the ceiling of the last room where they'd told me, once again to no effect, I supposedly was dying surrounded by my progeny accompanied by the usual want to be survivors quietly waiting to dig right in to counting what they thought they should be getting for years of witless fawning, at least it seemed to me that was what they were hoping with some wistful wishful fantasies, so all could stop their wondering when I'd be gone and they'd be free to get on about their marble busted lives without me being burdensome to dreams of soft reality. ©2008 by icebox . |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
((((Charlie)))) ... for god's sake! Tremendous poetry, masterfully written and so extremely achingly touching. Love ... and thank you for the eyes! Margherita  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Great writing, Mr. Ice. You are a master poet. Ida |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Why is the narrator surrounded by such people? I don't understand. Even at the risk of growing old alone, I will not tolerate such people. Anyway, I find it sad and intolerable, feelings invoked by your fine writing, again. Masterful. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Hello, Icebox. I heard about your great gift from my friend and fellow poet, Ida. Her estimation of your brilliance was in no way an exaggeration! I'll be digging through the archives to read your work. Best wishes, Art |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Dear icebox, I don't think there's a poet alive who just writes the words without the emotion behind them so you have touched me deeply here. When it comes to the people around you I would normally say that it's not possible to know what another is thinking and feeling but in your case I would say that it's highly likely that you do know. I guess we've just got to remember that we're all human and that the "essence" of the other is probably reacting in a completely opposite manner. Would that we could really know ourselves. Take care, Helen |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"survivors quietly waiting to dig right in to counting what they thought they should be getting " I have seen too much of this myself and am contemplating having nothing of value of my own when that time comes ~~  M |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Mr Ice.. a master poet indeed! enjoyed  love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The last time my mother scared us, she said she might yet live if we'd only stop kissing her goodbye. *chuckle* I have my father's face and my mother's charm. a hug, you. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
as always...fine writing! I am especially fond of: "burning bridges set in flames by crossing pain against the striking flint of time" very serious, sustained applause! |
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BugBuggy Member
since 2005-12-19
Posts 130michigan |
great great great.....your poetry has such strong emotion..thank you BugBuggy |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Charly...I missed this...and now, it hurts to read it. Hugging you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Charlie, Shades of Harry Bosch! This is seriously good, very powerful emotive writing, BTW, I think your new picture adds to the impact of the words, Good job John |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Mr. C., as you have probably noticed I haven't had time to get in here lately, but tonight I felt "called." Now I know why. Though this poem may be reflective of your own very personal trials, it strikes me as being a universal-type of reflection; it is certainly true in a few situations of which I know well. Our final trial, I think, and a trial of those surrounding; and the person who is suffering, aging or dying is the "witness." When that time comes, may the feather fall weightless on Mot's scale for you, my friend. |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i feel a warrior managing pain. Strong, sad and angry. be amazed with all you've done. your words are like a story. Kindly, |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Thank you all for using precious time to read and to comment. |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
I love this one..... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Icebox, This rather moves along slowly. It's restful enough to put one to sleep. Bobby |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
I am humbled just to read from such a gift… Tammy<333 |
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