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Open Poetry #42

violation of a housemaid

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-03-24 10:59 AM

violation of a housemaid
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Shadow is touching the tower.
Her way to home is through the park
Butterflied stretches of verdant.
Teasing loneliness taking nap…
Her way back is a length without
Any of the daily clatters.
So they, the assassins of her
Are not known to her consciousness.

Butterflies fly evenly calm
Over an assault, resting in
An innocent green of South Park.
Sun flows with dark blood till birds sleep.
Wake up, humanity alive
Within the uterus of life!

clever talks delay friendship!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2008-03-24 07:26 PM

Oh, what a powerful write, with incredible imagery!

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

2 posted 2008-03-24 07:36 PM

Wow!!!!

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

3 posted 2008-03-25 08:12 AM

this is a very fine write Ku! enjoyed it very much! love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2008-03-26 01:47 PM

Dear Ku, this is an impressive write. Makes me want to shout with you the last two lines ...
The combination of butterflies suggesting harmony and the crime, so strident.

So sad.

Love,
Margherita

Seoulair
Senior Member

since 2008-03-27

Posts 807
Seoul S.Korea

5 posted 2008-03-27 03:25 AM

Yes, I agree, this is a fine write.

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