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midnightdreamer
Member

since 2008-02-03

Posts 309
Roy,ut

0 posted 2008-03-16 04:44 PM

Will you cry?
If I die?
Will you come to see me
Because of my pain?
What would you do
If you saw me laying
In a hospital bed?
Sorry I’m dark
Sorry I’m not right for you
The more you do this
The more you lose me
I would care now
But maybe later
I won’t be able to feel anything at all
Before I can’t cry anymore
I want to say
“I love you mom. Please for give me”

black beautiful eyes looking back at me telling me, no fear will show.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2008-03-16 04:56 PM

Lots of feeling here...James

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

2 posted 2008-03-16 05:38 PM

this is deep great write

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2008-03-16 05:43 PM

Deeply emotional! It's good to say those healing words. Any Mom would cry ...
Love,
Margherita

midnightdreamer
Member

since 2008-02-03

Posts 309
Roy,ut

4 posted 2008-03-16 06:23 PM

thanks guys. ummmm......marhertia i don't really think my mom would cry. she would probably just look at it the way she looks at anything else. paperwork. but you would think she would cry wouldn't you? well thanks for guys comments.

midnightdreamer

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2008-03-16 08:39 PM

Oh very sad Write!-- of coarse anyone would cry if someone died that they knew..

Well thats would I would think!

ARCTIC WIND

effjayel
Senior Member

since 2007-09-30

Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity

6 posted 2008-03-17 12:49 PM

I want to say
“I love you mom. Please for give me”...

Then do it, if not today, tomorrow. I had the chance & blew it...it was too late for me, don't make the same mistake as I did.//it will haunt you for years, trust me

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

7 posted 2008-09-25 12:15 PM

i know exactly how you feel...my mom doesn't approve of me at all and sometimes i don't think she cares at all...but i still love her. the emotion in your poem is great.

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