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Open Poetry #42

[I abandoned / my family]

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

0 posted 2008-03-15 02:04 PM

I abandoned
my family
and later
returned
with gifts
from the city
that had glittered
like an unknown coin
at the bottom
of the pond

a movie camera
for my wife

for my children
balloons
filled
with city air
so that when
they burst,
the sun
was seen
through
factory smoke

my wife
filmed it all
in a movie
she will only play
backwards;
it ends
with the title:
ONCE WE LIVED IN THE COUNTRY

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Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-03-15 02:57 PM

You are good, very good!

Perfect in its reflection of contemporary life.

Love,
Margherita

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2008-03-16 12:17 PM

Very well written, Shirtless.
Ida

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2008-03-16 02:23 AM

Interesting. I like it.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

4 posted 2008-03-16 04:59 AM

i sincerely enjoyed your poem...

Have a nice day

yann

effjayel
Senior Member

since 2007-09-30

Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity

5 posted 2008-03-16 11:21 AM

Shirtless, that was really good...

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