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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Above clouds Distant mountains On old graves Ghost flowers grow Leaves rustle In darkened forest Among its shadows Sleeping deer At night on water Moonlight dances To a soughing cadence Along the shore One cricket calls From autumn grasses Spirits wander Over broken stone . |
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LadyTom Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 353LA, CA |
Shivering fires Burned up old stories Invisible smoke flies off the past |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I am especially fond of the beginning and ending of this! applause!! |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I hope more folks will be reading/commenting on this 'write!' continuing applause! |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
absolutely wonderful, such pleasure for great art. thanks 2islander2 |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I think it was perfect as is, my friend. j. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Thank you all Aikura was the last town visited by Alan Booth, (1946-1993), in his last book: Looking for the Lost, Journeys Through a Vanishing Japan. I can not describe its impact except to say I continue re-reading it. Thank You all again, John . |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Enjoyed this, John especially the first verse. Ida |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Among the best of your best, John. There is no way not to truly appreciate your skills. Best, Jim Aitken |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I am glad I found this, dear John, it speaks volumes and the scenery you evoke is amazing. Love. Margherita |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
At night on water Moonlight dances To a soughing cadence Along the shore...." I like this part the most because i can really see what your talking about because you describe it in such beauty, but poetic! lol  I love to see the moon and space, i am very interested in the moon and other parts of stuff in Space-- thank you for sharing this lovely piece with all the fellow pips! ARCTIC WIND |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
it is extremely unusual for me to return to a poem for a third 'official' read (and 'comment/reply' post)...this 'write' is assuredly well worth another visit! continuing applause!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"One cricket calls From autumn grasses" I can hear it, even above the howl of tonight's final winter sigh. |
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