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Apprehension in the Wind
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Apprehension in the Wind |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
It breathes unrest as chimes awake The words within as will contemplate a source of mood, the mind does make; It breathes unrest the wind It breathes unrest the wind A blanket covers well the soul, the missing one and partially whole; Shields the bitter of the chill while chimes in torment swing, Then, silence is their sing. Is the source that one can speak Or, of the utter dark of deep, Will the unrest in water drown Once upon a cheek? Once upon a cheek? ~miscellanea~ [This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-09-2008 03:27 AM).] |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Just a little history of this: When hunting for a spreadsheet in my documents file, I found this. I wrote it right after Sy's death and a death of a former student who had just turned thirteen and had a heart attack. Now, I realize this could have been written about anything. [This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-09-2008 06:10 PM).] |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I think this is an incredible poem. You are right, it could be about anything. I think it is wonderful that it is for Sy and your friend - and it's a keeper. That's all I know. It's a keeper. Alison |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow, this is really touching |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
Excellent poem  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Alison, Thanks for your comment. I had tried to write a tribute befitting for such a marvelous and inspirational poet as Sy, but my writing could not do him justice, so I didn't post one. I was thankful to all those who expressed so eloquently the thoughts I shared. Writing helped me cope with the loss of Sy and a former student of thirteen years of age. A third and fifth grade student of mine unexpectedly lost their mother, as well. I wrote it on a windy evening when the wind chimes were restless. Their restlessness seemed to be my own. The key part in it for me was: "The words within as will contemplate a source of mood, the mind does make; I was trying to tell myself that we have the choice of how we deal with loss. Sometimes, just need a booster shot, consequently, I wrote to needle it out. It gives me pleasure that you found something in this poem that was worthy of reading. Thanks again. miscellanea [This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-10-2008 07:57 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Thank you, dear Misc, for this intensely touching poem. And thank you for bringing dear Seymour close once again to our heart, as we are missing him so very much. They are home, the pain is so overwhelming for those who remain. Love, Margherita |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wind chimes can stir many emotions, and this poem befits the emotional stirrings that accompany loss. I can hear them gently chiming a goodbye to the departed souls. Well done, misce. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing and mention of the choice...James |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Miscellanea, that is so good. A lot of thought went into that one. Much enjoyed. Lindsay |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I read in one of the replies that you wrote, that this poem was written during an time of emotionally draining losses ~ the passing of our beloved Seymour, being one of them. A convincing expression of your "unrest" ~ and done so, very poetically. Love & Eternal Light ~ and a comforting, hug, Linda  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Vivid mood here. I could feel the essence of a fireplace, with a storm roaring outside, and a vast empty space seeking fill on the inside. Well done. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
passing shadows, I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Take care, ~misce'~ xTr3m3sT, Thank you for your kind response. ~misce'~ |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Margherita, Thank you for your observant response. You used the words, "intensely touching poem". You picked up on the reason I filed it away. Too intense for me. Enough time has passed that I am reminded grieving and questioning can be just a part of any thing. They help us cherish and sustain memories and enable us to move on. Hugs to you, lovely Margherita. ~misce'~ Earth Angel, Hugs right back to you, Earth Angel! Even though this projects a very dismal mood, since it was written I've gone beyond the mood and accepted things the way they are. It's been a pleasure to have known those who live each day to the fullest. Sy certainly did, as did the former student who died shortly after a wrestling practice. He had known he had a heart condition, had conferred with his doctors, then went on to enjoy middle school to the fullest, without showing apprehension or fear. These are days to celebrate the lives of such people. (My poem fails in that respect. I would much rather celebrate!!!) ~misce'~ [This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-10-2008 12:12 PM).] |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Midnitesun, T Thank you for your kind response. Yes, chimes, like music, can stir those emotions... I'm glad they have been released and brighter days have come. ~ misce'~ James, The memory of fine people who evoked these feelings of loss... and gain, to just have had them in my life was definitely a gain. Thank you. ~misce'" |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Lindsay P., I appreciate your kind response. Yes, some thought went into this. Acceptance of loss has always been difficult for me. Writing has become a tremendous friend when things become challenging. It has made jumping those hurdles much easier. Thanks again for your kindness. ~misce'~ This Diamond, You perceived the vast setting and essence perfectly--the unlit fireplace and the bare windows-something that needed filling. Thought and reflection have done just that. I will remember those special people and their families. Thank you for your response, my poetic friend. ~misce' [This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-10-2008 12:15 PM).] |
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