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Felix Visits Dad
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Felix Visits Dad |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania 
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Felix is in the Army. He’s stationed near where his Dad’s locked up. Felix’s Uncle Joe, wants Felix to visit his Dad. Felix says okay. Felix figures he can handle it. Felix remembers when his Dad was taken away. It wasn’t pretty. Dad was violent. Dad was always violent. Dad was a very, violent person. Dad was bad with guns. Dad was bad with knives. Dad was a violent person. When they got to the lock-up, Dad was peeling potatoes. Dad looked at Felix. Dad asked Uncle Joe, “Has he been to prison yet?” Uncle Joe said, “No he’s been lucky so far.” Dad says “Good, that’s good.”, and he touched Felix’s face. That’s all there was, that’s the visit to Dad. Felix is older now. He can handle that kind of stuff. He’s in the Army. He’s a soldier. He hopes his Dad is proud of him. Bobby |
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hiddensmiles Senior Member
since 2008-02-07
Posts 514at the beach... i wish |
i like this |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Hiddensmiles, Thanks for the kind words on this one. I very pleased you liked it. Bobby |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like this very much -Juju |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
you know Bobby, I'm 100% positive that Felix's Dad was very proud of his boy.. love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Sounds like the army was Felix's saving grace. My youngest brother joined the army when he was 18 and I am certain it saved him from jail or death. I'm sure Felix's father had plenty of time to think about the path his son took and be proud of him in his way. Ida |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...reminds me of the time I was on KP and I told the mess Sargeant that I wasn't going to scrub his pots...he gave me a lecture about the Army was going to make me or break me...next thing you know I was peeling potatoes half the night...and on a series of following nights I pulled extra guard duty...lost lots of sleep over my failure to clean some pots...James |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
How sad that Felix's dad has to ask... |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Juju, Thanks Hon, I'm very pleased you liked this write. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Dear RDB, Yes, you know, I think he was. He was glad to hear I'd stayed out of prison. Poor Dad. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Ida, You know what, I think he was proud. Bobby |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Bobby, this was very well-written. It may have been simply stated, however, the simplicity of it, as well as the repetition of words, worked very well and packed a powerful punch. I'm with Ida, I do believe that Felix's Dad was proud of him being in the army ~ and not in jail like himself!  Linda |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
James, Yes, we do tend to learn things in the Army. I hated KP myself. Bobby |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
I know he was proud. Anyone who serves the country and stays out of the wrong path the father may have taken...has to have a dad that's proud. No matter the situation. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Simon, Yes, that is sad. Dad knew how things were. It's interesting to note that China, with 1.3 Billion people has few people incarcerated than the U. S. with only 300 million people. That is sad too. The Philadelphia Inquirer this morning called the U. S. "Prison Nation". Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Earth Angel, Thanks Hon. Yes, I hope he was. Poor Dad. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
ILoveTheRain, Thanks for the kind words. Dad was from Georgia. I still get down there on occasions. Bobby |
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LadyTom Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 353LA, CA |
Love and care, natural blood bond. Nice. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
LadyTom, You've got it Hon. There is nothing like that natural blood bond. There's no way you can get away from it. Bobby |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Bobby, you think maybe the rehabilitation process worked for his Dad? seems like it was maybe the first time he raised his hand to someone & did not inflict pain.....good read John |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
John, Perhaps, however Felix feels it might be due to the ageing process. Bobby |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I read this days ago and got kind of choked up. I think that one touch said everything he could not say. I hope it was a healing touch for Felix - good poem, Bobby. A |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This is a theme that reoccurs in your writing. You make me feel for Felix. |
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