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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2007-08-30 09:30 AM

You took my hand
(that day)
we strolled between
the trumpets and sea

on deck we drank
from dotted lines
intoxication filled
the sunstruck
strangers,

hidden clouds
declined to grey

our skins suspended
eyes on gulls
the interception
for the the blinding
sign that never came

stranded in this stilllife,
we watched the bay

the searching stars
would fail to write
new constellations

not quite diving in
sitting sideline
watching ocean stretches

its ocillations,
from the foam that simmers
to the great white way

it seems
dear friend,
we never drenched
the sand,
shying clear
from the grit of footprints

alas
this kit glove love

nothing to be buried

not much
for the waves
to wash away.

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

1 posted 2007-08-30 10:16 AM

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This is very good

John

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Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2007-08-30 10:21 AM

quote:
stranded in this stilllife,
we watched the bay

the searching stars
would fail to write
new constellations

You have created a very captivating atmosphere.

I also love the ending, though it's heavy with melancholy.

Special!

Love,
Margherita

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

3 posted 2007-08-30 10:23 AM

"it seems
dear friend,
we never drenched
the sand,
shying clear
from the grit of footprints"

Brooklyn Gal... great words that say much.
             Would that courage win out
               rather than lose the chance
                 of a life time. Write on!
                    Enjoyed.

                 MoonShadow.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2007-08-30 11:16 AM

I am there feeling the sand on bare feet, hearing the surf roll in......ahhh Mish....feel you deep in this one. Very nicely done m'friend.........indeed.

after a fall I get back up,
move on 'cause the past is the past and theres no tomorrow if remaining in still waters while the river flows on ~dsmith

Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

5 posted 2007-08-31 11:27 AM

very nice, enjoyed

I am the little cracked mirror

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2007-08-31 11:32 AM

"stranded in this stilllife,
we watched the bay"

~ and Goddess, what a lovely scene you have painted.

Loving hug,
EA

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

7 posted 2007-08-31 08:59 PM

thank you kindly for reading me

always appreciated

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2007-09-03 03:58 AM

"alas
this kit glove love

nothing to be buried

not much
for the waves
to wash away."

Nicely penned.

JL

Blessed are those who are generous, because they feed the poor.
~Proverbs 22:9 NLT

adagio
Member

since 2005-03-19

Posts 449
Marrero, La.

9 posted 2007-09-05 05:24 PM

Loved this one Ink!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2007-09-05 05:42 PM

Enjoyed...James

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2007-09-06 10:53 AM

SweetInkyOne~
You already know via email that I love this one ...~

As for the typo ... you can let readers know HERE ... or ask a moderator or admin to edit for you after the 24 hour time frame has passed~

*HUGLETS*
~*Marge*~

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