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Quantum Similarity
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Quantum Similarity |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Mornings are the same, Although they come to me in late afternoon, Coffee brews the same, A taste that arrives none too soon, Dressing is the same, I lack variety by closely planned design, Colors are they same, I’ve taken the darkness as mine. Evenings are the same Diet attempts to shed a pound or two And still they remain, Despite grand cooking the plain will do Desire simply contained Shut away tight on a shelve or two. The nights are the same, I can work at work without thought, The sights are the same Seldom is any excitement brought And when it is near Other concerned do what ever they ought And I don’t go there. I remain the same Doing what I wish because I can I remain the same A simple solitary man Gloom |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Solitary, but never simple. Enjoyed the read, poet Gloom. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
I enjoyed this very much. At first I was worried that you'd overdo the use of "same" but you didn't. Nicely done indeed. Cheers - Ed “Well all the apostles, they’re sittin’ on the swings, sayin’ I’d sell off my savior for a set of new rings.” |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
at least I enjoyed reading your wonderful poem if the life there was silently quiet. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Hey Gloomy One!  Good stuff here, as usual. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
Grimy floors and grey steel doors cigarette breaks at 2 and 6 Weekend laundry and bars at 8 drive too fast, can't be late good capture of dark and crummy worknights. peace "Ah! my Be-loved, fill the cup that clears |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sounds like you are happy with the same routine is a good thing I guess, but sometimes we need change when we feel like we're dying (though change is hard) good poem here, I can relate |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thanks to all those that read and respond it is a pleasure to please you with my words Gloom |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
A fine thoughtful 'write'! [a celebration of individuality and the independent spirit; etc.!] I am particularly fond of the ending!: "I remain the same Doing what I wish because I can I remain the same A simple solitary man" serious applause!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Not so simple... although solitary. M |
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