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A Beautiful Disaster
Member

since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

0 posted 2007-08-20 09:51 AM

Forever. Yours.

This lonely day has turned into night,
I feel my heart explode in my chest.
One bitter tear sparks in my eye,
The soul behind it knows no rest.
The light of one more candle is gone,
Reality is scaring my hope,
And through the night I'll be all alone...
But I will keep the promise. I'll cope.

The night. The day.
The miles. Away.
The waiting. Hard.
So frail. Apart.
The dusk. The dawn.
Afraid. Uknown.
Still lost. No way.
Alone. Again.

But everything we're going through
Is bound to leave a mark on my heart.
This mark will bind our lives, me and you.
Tomorrow will be a new start.
I'll shield you from the sword of your fate,
And, bleeding, I will fight for you, still.
The one it took you long to create
Will heal you by one movement of will.

Your eyes. The light.
Arms broken. Fight.
My heart. My hand.
Love. Till the end.
The promise. Here.
With you. No fear.
New ways. New doors.
Forever. Yours.

EmilySian
Junior Member

since 2007-08-19

Posts 21
England

1 posted 2007-08-20 10:01 AM

I really like this. Very poignant, and moving. The last stanza I think in paarticular is effective.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

2 posted 2007-08-20 12:37 PM

Loved the unique style and the way it compelled me to read it..

well done!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

A Beautiful Disaster
Member

since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

3 posted 2007-08-21 06:09 AM

Aww thanks!

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2007-08-21 09:43 AM

"But everything we're going through
Is bound to leave a mark on my heart.
This mark will bind our lives, me and you.
Tomorrow will be a new start."

This verse leaped out at me.
There is always hope in tomorrow.

JL

HopeS
Member Elite

since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

5 posted 2007-08-21 10:32 AM

Touching and heartfelt

Hope

TomMark
Member Elite

since 2007-07-27

Posts 2133
LA,CA

6 posted 2007-08-22 02:17 AM

always enjoy your writing.

Tomtoo

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2007-08-22 07:48 AM

One of your best...a joy to read...James

A Beautiful Disaster
Member

since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

8 posted 2007-08-24 10:29 AM

Thanks for responding!

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