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the fragile of momma jane
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the fragile of momma jane |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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the old woman would read the words on her frigidare with chips and gravy a poem by her son when he was alive written to god about sparrows and forgiveness and coffee smells she would talk to the lord then about how she loved him how she missed him and poppa since they went out in the boat and didn't come back home again her old eyes would get watershine she would rub the poem paper slow like a little girl finger painting trying to make their faces appear so she could kiss them goodbye sometimes the lord would talk too she would listen and smile and turn on tbn and the preacher boys then just go to heaven for a while sitting there beside the gold road watching for the familiar of her men |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 Thank you for this one. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this should have had a warning! Made my eyes sting...  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
very touching, Dark |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
a wonderful one. esp "her old eyes would get watershine she would rub the poem paper slow like a little girl finger painting trying to make their faces appear so she could kiss them goodbye" very touching and emotional beautiful enjoyed |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Most beautiful! You warm that chill off my morning. A |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
This is one of the best poems I've seen on here in a very long time. Cheers mate - Ed “Well all the apostles, they’re sittin’ on the swings, sayin’ I’d sell off my savior for a set of new rings.” |
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ladylisa Member
since 2007-04-29
Posts 342Florida USA |
Wonderful!!!! This is why I love with all my heart. Great poem...... |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
Oh, my. Very sad. Well done - I very much enjoyed this. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
this one fish-hooks me right in the heart! touching write... g "...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
your heart is showing and it looks good |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Yes, this is the "You" I especially enjoy reading~~  M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
most humble thanks to each of you for your review of this soul side seeping..pipkrew you are a blessing to my mind, thank you ms sun, you bless me _______ ms suesea, humble thanks to you ______ ms drauntz, thank you for the read ________ kahlil friend, thank you so much for the touch ________ ms az, lil lady you smile me thanks babe ___________ ed, thanks sir for the touch ____________ ladylisa, thank you so much ms for your read ________ ms bb, thank you for the read _____ dgv, you bless me thanks to you ________ MMs, thanks babe for your smiles __________ ladyone, your reads are special, thank you for the moments |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
"watching for the familiar of her men" So many emotions vie forth from memory to present with that one perfect ending line, which seems a string that's pulling my heart right out of me. When you write this way, the whole world seems fragile. Come back with a hug.  love, reg |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
regalone, a very slow hug...dirt road private river kind, thanks babe |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
her old eyes would get watershine she would rub the poem paper slow like a little girl finger painting trying to make their faces appear so she could kiss them goodbye You've taken us right into your poem... right into her room... Fantastic heart-touching work!!! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sometimes, you touch all the right place, just so... thank you D, for the touch. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
suthern, thanks my friend ___________ ms gs, thanks babe |
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mytuesdaywishes Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 254a voice from the musicbox |
i havent been on this site for awhile...for a reason. but its good to see that there are still true poets here. lovely and sad. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you tuesday |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Well Sir, youdaman. I'm never disappointed when I read what your ink bleeds. This is perfection. I see images and feel emotions that only you can evoke. Much obliged for your sharing. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
larry, thank you sir for the eyed-bye |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This is outstanding. Wow! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Don't know why I went to see the "Today's Topics", but I feel sure blessed by finding this poem up today (Earl finds pearls!) It gave me goosebumps. Going to read it once again. Love, Margherita |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Margherita... Indeed... Earl digs deep... and uncovers many treasures. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks you guys.... EB, Mar and Sun...you bless me |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you, Earl, for reviving this one. I hadn't seen it and would have missed a beautiful piece of work. The best poems can come from the simplest subjects or emotions. You painted a great one here, DS. I can envision and feel it very clearly in it's melancholy way....superb. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
humble thanks deer... |
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