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WindWalker
Senior Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

0 posted 2007-08-16 11:35 PM

It's Autumn once again;
drifting leaves
attempt to shroud my memories;
rain falls like tears
washing away a last remnant
of hope that had lingered
in the soft warmth
of your fading breath.

Birds twitter timidly in shadows;
as mist assists the waning light;
empty meadows offer their soggy carpet
for my feet to wander aimlessly.

I hear your whisper
before the breeze dies down;
see your tears fall
from bare branches
to a lifeless ground.

Night defeats day
without a challenge
but as darkness asserts her reign
in this underworld of whispers,
the moon appears
and for a brief instant
the memories that shine
cast an eerie shadow
upon an empty world.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2007-08-17 09:19 AM

oh this is breathtakingly beautiful WindWalker...oh indeed the memories shine through...

just lovely

each time makes me stronger...but after the fall....
we get back up and move on,
because the past is the past
and there is no tomorrow
if remaining in still waters
while the river flows on...~dmsmith~

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2007-08-17 09:28 AM

"Night defeats day
without a challenge
but as darkness asserts her reign
in this underworld of whispers,
the moon appears"

OMG, what a fantastic line!
Sheesh, this entire piece is totally exquisite writing, WW!

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2007-08-17 10:11 AM

WindWalker~

'Birds twitter timidly in shadows;
as mist assists the waning light;
empty meadows offer their soggy carpet
for my feet to wander aimlessly.'

LOVE the internal rhyme of 'as mist assists the waning light'~

This is a very pleasurable read~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

TomMark
Member Elite

since 2007-07-27

Posts 2133
LA,CA

4 posted 2007-08-17 11:20 AM

absolute beautiful.

wonderful read.

Tomtoo

ggrn3
Member

since 2000-08-17

Posts 433
Nahunta Georgia U.S.

5 posted 2007-08-17 11:38 AM

I loved this one Windwalker.
You seemed to walk with the wind
and your pen float on a breeze as
you eased this one on paper.

Garfield

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2007-08-17 11:55 AM

beautifully written
loved this

Night defeats day
without a challenge
but as darkness asserts her reign
in this underworld of whispers,
the moon appears
and for a brief instant
the memories that shine
cast an eerie shadow
upon an empty world.

even though a dark feeling, it was still magnificantly done...I adored this...

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2007-08-17 03:04 PM

Nice...James

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

8 posted 2007-08-17 09:21 PM

Simply wonderful!!

I am especially fond of:
“…mist assists the waning light”;

AND:

“Night defeats day
without a challenge
but as darkness asserts her reign
in this underworld of whispers,
the moon appears
and for a brief instant
the memories that shine
cast an eerie shadow
upon an empty world(!).

Now THAT is POETRY!!!

Incredibly serious and long-sustained applause!!

kasey191
Junior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 33
Australia

9 posted 2007-08-18 10:38 PM

magical

EmilySian
Junior Member

since 2007-08-19

Posts 21
England

10 posted 2007-08-19 05:36 AM

This is very poignant....got an almost haunting feel to it. I liked it a lot!

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