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WindWalker
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0 posted 2007-07-16 06:22 PM


A deep, quiet forest stunned by diversity;
an alpine meadow dancing in paintbrushes;
eagles soaring in stark blue skies of Summer;
above jagged black peaks piercing fog;
a walk along a thundering shore in December;
or skipping gentle waves kissing sand in Spring:
gulls cry in stereo unseen in shimmering waves
as the sun beats down upon sand dunes...
Clouds roll ominously across the sky
and thunder rumbles far away in the hills
and I yearn to understand what it all means
for if ever I do, that shall define who I am –
forever –  The seasons pass, chase each other
and each one puts its impression on my face.

Snow drifts over an icy gray street;
fallen leaves dance on the Autumn wind;
a morning glory closes itself to the sun:
a sunflower turns slowly in my mind...

I move the clock of time backward
remembering the feeling you gave me
the very first time I looked into your eyes:
their blue light rivalling both sky and sea
and how easy it was to swim in them!
Such love I felt for you then;
such love I may have shown you
had you chosen to stay the hand of destiny.
The Universe called you back
and my dream ended as suddenly
as it started.  

And yet... how much I love you still!
I shall chase after you
when this life releases me in turn:
I swear I shall find you again.

© Copyright 2007 Sharran WindWalker - All Rights Reserved
Drauntz
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1 posted 2007-07-16 07:11 PM


absolutely beautiful. A wonderful piece.

wow, amazing energy...

very beautiful truly.

secondhanddreampoet
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2 posted 2007-07-16 09:16 PM


This ‘write’ has some of just about everything grand and fine!:

what a marvelous opening line:

“A deep, quiet forest stunned by diversity (!)”

and I love images such as:

“gentle waves kissing sand in Spring:
gulls cry in stereo unseen in shimmering waves”

and THIS truly ‘wafts along the eternal plane’!:

“Clouds roll ominously across the sky
and thunder rumbles far away in the hills
and I yearn to understand what it all means
for if ever I do, that shall define who I am(!)”

and what magnificent ‘Romanticism’:

“I move the clock of time backward
remembering the feeling you gave me
the very first time I looked into your eyes:
their blue light rivaling both sky and sea

how much I love you still!
I shall chase after you
when this life releases me in turn:
I swear I shall find you again.”

very, very serious and long sustained applause!!

[another poetic ‘standing ovation’!!]


Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2007-07-16 09:22 PM


Bravo!!! You've written such a wondrous piece I cannot highlight any one set of images. What an incredibly gorgeous, romantic poem!
The Lady
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4 posted 2007-07-17 01:10 PM




extraordinary
but these lines called me back...

"I move the clock of time backward
remembering the feeling you gave me
the very first time I looked into your eyes:"

you speak for all of us WindWalker
and you do it well


Honeybunch
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5 posted 2007-07-18 06:13 AM


Lovely write, WW.  Brought on a sigh though.
suthern
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6 posted 2007-07-18 01:01 PM


and my dream ended as suddenly
as it started.  

And yet... how much I love you still!
I shall chase after you
when this life releases me in turn:
I swear I shall find you again.

How beautiful!!! Great images... and so very romantic! *S*

mytuesdaywishes
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a voice from the musicbox
7 posted 2007-07-19 11:13 AM


beautiful imagery.
and sincere, so important.


MoonShadow
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Dark side of the Moon.
8 posted 2007-07-20 02:37 PM



   Captivating... powerfully compelling.

          MoonShadow
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BBGrrl
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since 2007-07-17
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BC, Canada
9 posted 2007-07-20 02:43 PM


"an alpine meadow dancing in paintbrushes;"

Stunning.  All of the above.  

Emotional - this touched me very deeply.

CocoBaci
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10 posted 2007-08-27 01:26 AM


WindWalker, a most enjoyed read!
*~coco~*

JamesMichael
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11 posted 2007-08-27 05:49 AM


Super...James
Marchmadness
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12 posted 2008-01-14 12:42 PM


This is truly romantic poetry. Love it.
                                     Ida

Clang
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13 posted 2008-01-14 07:59 AM


Very romantic indeed.  I loved the discriptive parts about nature.  I too am astounded by the awe of this world.  Sometimes I feel so small just standing in a field, or just being outdoors period.  Well done.  I hope you find the person you are looking for.
Midnitesun
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14 posted 2008-01-14 08:07 AM


Thank you Ida, for bringing this one back for all to read one of Pips all-time most romantic offerings.
WW, this one is part of my favorites library.

secondhanddreampoet
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15 posted 2008-01-14 01:02 PM


I am REALLY glad to see this outstanding 'penning'
back near the top of the "P.I.P.-land" queue!

continuing hyper-serious applause!!

ArtSolstice
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16 posted 2008-01-14 03:37 PM


WOW !! Thank you, Ida, for moving this powerful write to the first page. How'd I miss this gem the first time around??
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