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in the wake of butterflies.... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 still you tongue tie and twist this heart of mine tighter ‘round where it’s always been oh still and then this damn smile that I can’t erase do you know? no one has ever or ever will take your place first in my heart of hearts as then still…. yes you always will leave me weak in the wake of butterflies ~I don’t make excuses I won’t apologize~ you are still…. my sweetest of sighs ~SEA~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Know for a fact, that if you lose someone special, just anyone won't replace them, it takes someone just as special to fill the empty place in your heart...Still the ones that are the most special are the ones that stay with you...James |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine poem! [can any two people possibly manage to 'stay together' anymore...amid the relentless 'externalities' (ever-increasing pressures placed on relationships) of the "Runaway American Dream"?!] Applause for this 'write'! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Susan, ================ still you tongue tie and twist this heart of mine tighter ‘round where it’s always been oh still and then this damn smile that I can’t erase do you know? no one has ever or ever will take your place first in my heart of hearts as then still…. yes you always will leave me weak in the wake of butterflies ~I don’t make excuses I won’t apologize~ you are still…. my sweetest of sighs ~SEA~ ==================== So taking anything out to emphasis what I like most was like dismantling something I love. I just couldn't do it. I love your writes and then you go and provide an inspiring image and just create the best of reading pleasure a diehard romantic could ever hope for.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
~I don’t make excuses I won’t apologize~ ~*~ and in that proclamation, you fly!  |
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gwaihir Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 58Sub-tropical, USA |
"Weak in the wake of butterflies" -- Great image. I love it when I read something unexpected like that. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
my sweetest of sighs ~~ a nice thing to be  Hope you are well, it is so nice to be reading you M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
yeah right...I bet you say that to all of the superheros..(grin)..enjoyed it ms |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
lovely sigh song sea. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah~ the contemplative..and wistful nature of this combined with the personal truth..the knowledge.... you blend it well..and in a poetic way that appeals.... this shows heart ma'am.... and soul... |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
So heart felt and full of love here Sea, you tied my heart in a knot for a moment by the sadness and undid it again by your memory of love, thanks for sharing my friend. Rick |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful imagery here Ruth |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you all so very much for reading this Larry  you are the best...this really wasn't meant to be sad...I got a phone call from a very special friend and it made my day a thousand times better...I couldn't get the smile off my face!!  |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
"yes you always will leave me weak in the wake of butterflies" what a wonderful expression... I can feel the static. And awesome picture, speaking of seascapes.. ;-) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh, Susan, this is such a lovely write! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
SEA I love the beauty you share And this is so beautiful. Thank you. Alison |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I can still see that smile from here dear. and seeing that smile? Makes me smile...  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
do you know? no one has ever or ever will take your place first in my heart of hearts as then still…. yes you always will I love this! *S* The title drew me in... and I'm so glad it did... Your person gave you a smile... your words (and my memories) put one on my face, too. *S* |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
oh Susan...you spoke to me with this.. wonderful. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
susan this is incredible i do so love all of your poetry but this is lace |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Beautifully expressed , I feel much the same , my heart will forever hold his name do you know? no one has ever or ever will take your place Hope |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sighs... brought tears... you do... beautiful! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
What partner would not love to read or here those words whispered to them...Something that would last a lifetime. An excellent write, thanx Susan. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugssss you... a wonder with beauty ~~**~~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Susan, Been wayyyyyyy toooo long!! Your smile makes me smile. I know a thing or two about sweet sighs. Beautiful writing from a beautiful heart as always. Missed you! Amy "Life is not measured by the breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away" |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you so much for the sweet replies! |
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