Regretfully, I didn't attend.

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Open Poetry #41

Regretfully, I didn't attend.

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

0 posted 2007-08-07 02:08 AM

The stench must have been from the water below.
Putrid and polluted rushing along
cutting out the bank from under my feet.

Waves break, stretching out along loose stones
embracing at lengths carrying them far
from safe complacency, a final rest in the river bed.

The sun seemed solemn, half heartedly glinting
torn within itself, shining but hoping for clouds.
Birds sang too, A harmonized dirge from their perch
releasing the requiem into the wind, then silence.

Through all of it they just stood
staring off into the horizon, waiting for God
never asking the all to familiar question
instead, they only nodded and dryed their eyes.

(I've been gone for quite a while, attempting to find an identity in poetry. I do hope that this offering after such a hiatus will be acceptable. Let me know what you all think.)

-John

nice use of muffin

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2007-08-07 02:32 AM

Very creative, and evokes all kinds of imagery. I liked it!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2007-08-07 09:02 AM

I enjoyed the "harmonized dirge" part.
Hope you find your personal song.

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

3 posted 2007-08-07 10:49 AM

What an excellent return... Great work

BBGrrl
Member

since 2007-07-17

Posts 181
BC, Canada

4 posted 2007-08-07 12:15 PM

Very sad. Nice images.
Last line - you meant "dried", correct?

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