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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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I watch you slip between the lines. As your cadence begins to slow, a pale ashen hue emanates from your brow where an amber glow should be, as furrowed memories etch themselves in deep sighs amid short shallow breaths. If time were all that told one's tale, yours would be a novel. But you sequestered yourself years ago, and so the stories are mere repetitions of livelier days. The touch of others rejected, it is as if your time on earth stopped when he left you so long ago. And now, frozen time-slips are all that remain, as you wait the reapers-call. I watch you slip between the lines wondering where your heart did go. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
ah...poignant spill, midnite.... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
indeed... insightful..observant.. and touching.. well done ma'am.. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
~whispering a thank you, for being here today~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Kacy, even in this poignant write I see so much beauty....always, you touch, with a touch that only you can do soooo well...  |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
Clills, goose-bumps and tears here, Midnitesun. Awesome write. Loving, respectful, sad ... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a most powerful, emotive 'write'! I am grandly fond of: "frozen time-slips(!)" I believe this has become one of the loneliest societies in the history of the world...and ever-increasing numbers of people end up rather 'forgotten'...with empty lives of 'quiet desperation' which would have to improve considerably just to be labeled 'tragic'! I know this particular 'story' all too well! Applause for this penning!! |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
I agree this is a most powerful, emotive 'write'!!!!!!!!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kacy, your write holds so much sensitivity and insight.....and compassion (I feel that)....sad. You write "real" so well.  ....jo |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Just look at how we all can relate to your beautifully written expression. You have a giant heart, Ms. Midnite. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Yes... quite true! Ms. Midnitesun and Ms. ArtSolstice (both of whom grace these blue pages of "P.I.P.-land" with their grandly erudite and finely crafted thoughts) are the 'biggest hearts' [innate (empathic/compassionate) 'secular humanists' and environmentalist/'natural philosophers'] that I have known! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
You have so wonderously described too many of those lonley, haunted women I know. You are a master at knowing feelings. thank you, "late" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Humble thank yous, for these warmest comments. This is indeed, a poem of one individual's reality, a reality I fear is multiplied coast-to-coast. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
amazing work Kacy digs deep |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Touching deep inside me and I thank you. A |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
grin--I had a bad moment and thought you meant ME!!! (Well, my stories are old, but I have to wait for the legal protection of the statute of limitations to tell 'em--and besides, my family got hep to me and now they glare at me threateningly, "Do not put this on the internet!"  )Who, ME?  Ah, Sistah Kacy--we just really don't know what goes on in people's lives. After reading this, and feeling bad about me, I realized I had completely forgotten everything I've gone through in the past six years... Give me boredom, I say! Nice write, lovely one! OH. And I've located my heart. The cardiolite was extremely helpful in that regard. But here's an extra for you!  |
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catgirl789 New Member
since 2007-08-15
Posts 8 |
It's a really pretty poem. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
This is powerful Kacy and it should be up near the top again. "late" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am reminded of my elderly maiden great aunt, whose life stopped when she lost the love of a man that she had adored more than life. Hers was a sad, long and drawn-out, demise as well. May both these woman find love, peace, and joy on The Other Side. Love & Eternal Light, Linda |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
Thank you, Latearrival, for bringing this work forward again. I read it through tears toward the end, it is so powerful and moving. |
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Gumpy Member
since 2007-11-06
Posts 143Canada |
Simply...gripping. A very fine write. Gumpy How is it that after your heart is ripped out, you feel so much? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Whispers of thanks, for all your warm tender replies. |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
sensitive and carefully penned sentiments....as if holding a friends hand, when these words are uttered... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Kacy, a beautiful poem by a poet with a heart, soul and compassion to be revered. - Owl |
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