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SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

0 posted 2008-01-23 06:08 PM

my mind found you
there, just random
a thought of something
I thought I forgot

and I lingered there with you
in the laughter
the electricity
of your scent

remembering
how the butterflies
flew
in the presence,
of you

and how I wondered
if you could tell
how lost to you
I truly was.

The absentminded smile,
some might think
means that I am still
lost

~they might
be right

~SEA~

icequeen
Senior Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

1 posted 2008-01-23 06:35 PM

I've always loved your work, and this is outstanding. Your talent for free-verse is something to envy, girl

Nice to see you again... thought I would drop in and read, and YaY! You're here!

Hugs
~Caroline~

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2008-01-23 06:52 PM

I know this type of absent minded smile Sues...and heck, let em think what they want.

tonyV
Junior Member

since 2008-01-14

Posts 36

3 posted 2008-01-23 09:44 PM

I enjoyed the style of this poem. Looking forward to reading more from you.

"The absentminded smile,
some might think
means that I am still
lost

~they might
be right"

That's what I was talking about when I referred to style.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2008-01-24 12:42 PM

Wonderful...James

Kamelian
Junior Member

since 2008-01-14

Posts 21
Australia

5 posted 2008-01-24 01:39 AM

Love it... I think many people could identify with this. My favourite part was "in the laughter
the electricity
of your scent"

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

6 posted 2008-01-24 07:44 AM

excellent graphics image...

I particularly like:

"remembering
how the butterflies
flew
in the presence,
of you"

applause!!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2008-01-24 09:36 AM

it's okay to be lost, makes it all the more fun

I do love your free verse and graphics

I don't know many people who have the talent for it

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

8 posted 2008-01-24 09:58 AM

Stay lost in that!
You have a beautiful mind.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

9 posted 2008-01-24 11:34 AM

"The absentminded smile,
some might think
means that I am still
lost

~they might
be right"

Yes, I do particularly like this. How true it is of most of us.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2008-01-24 12:52 PM

Hi, Susan!

"remembering
how the butterflies
flew
in the presence,
of you"

That is soooo you! ~ and that's a GOOD thang!

I enjoy your relaxed, easy-going style of writing. You pull your readers into your world.

Linda

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

11 posted 2008-01-24 04:16 PM

nothing random about thoughts of you...and this poem is so you!

Hugs, Robert

simon
Member

since 2008-01-14

Posts 440
London, England

12 posted 2008-01-24 06:06 PM

I love this. I am quite jealous though...

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

13 posted 2008-01-25 09:14 AM

thank you all so very much for your warm replies

It sure means a lot to me!

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

14 posted 2008-01-25 03:59 PM

ms suesea, when the fragile of your lady shows
she is a lovely woman..more please, always more

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

15 posted 2008-01-26 04:18 PM

very Much Enjoyed!!1

ARCTIC WIND

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

16 posted 2008-01-26 08:44 PM

You wrote it well Susan, great write.

Lindsay

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

17 posted 2008-01-30 02:02 AM

SEA

I could have sworn that I said how much I liked this. I guess I didn't .. but I liked it when I thought I had written that and I like it more now that I am sure to write that. Get that? I like this lots.

Alison

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

18 posted 2008-02-26 10:54 PM

i love random

random is good

i have to say though... thiking of the smell of electricity might not be the exact ambience you were going for.

love to read you, you always make me happy to have taken the time.

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