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Open Poetry #41

Senryu

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2008-01-18 07:02 PM

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Hard cold—
Even cats decide
To stay indoors

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TomMark
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since 2007-07-27

Posts 2133
LA,CA

1 posted 2008-01-18 08:16 PM

why senryu. it is
2,
5,
4,
Are you just retired?

Love the expression.

deep dark sea
shinning ice floats free
harpseals out

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2008-01-18 08:26 PM

??...as to the title...but, even more so on the 1st. 'comment/reply' post...

Bobby Jordan
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since 2007-08-13

Posts 491
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2008-01-18 08:46 PM

Huan Yi,

Don't they though. All wise cats stay indoors, if they can.

Bobby

TomMark
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since 2007-07-27

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4 posted 2008-01-18 08:50 PM

My dear lady Midnitesun, I don't believe that John miscounted his syllables. He just wanted that way. But i intentionally make my silly comments to tell John that I have read his poem and enjoyed it.

[This message has been edited by TomMark (01-18-2008 09:58 PM).]

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

5 posted 2008-01-18 09:10 PM

Thanks everyone

Consider
my "Japanese" poems in translation . . .

K,

The "cats" I knew would always insist
on "going out", for fights . . .and more
for other things.

Therein the humor.

Thanks again

John

TomMark
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since 2007-07-27

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6 posted 2008-01-18 10:03 PM

It is cold
I go out in fur
Boots stay home

to warm up
the thought of fine friends
long lost shoes

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