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Arius Miura de Galdri
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0 posted 2008-01-16 11:38 AM


"Life Eternal"

To live a life eternal
And fear not death or pain
To ne'er grow old, to never die
To never hurt again

Eternal youth and beauty
Unmarred by passing Time
To some it would be paradise
To others, but a crime

But with this gift comes sorrow
As those you know must die
To lose the ones you've come to love
No matter how you try

Would sadness overcome you?
The pain of loss, so strong
In vain you curse your mourning self
For living quite so long

AMdG

"My candle burns at both ends; it will not last the night; but ah, my foes, and oh, my friends--it gives a lovely light!"  -Edna St. Vincent Millay

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simon
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since 2008-01-14
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1 posted 2008-01-16 12:03 PM


I enjoyed this- very thoughtful.
Bobby Jordan
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since 2007-08-13
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2 posted 2008-01-16 12:07 PM


Arius Miura de Galdri,

Nicely written.

However, one can never live too long.  Life is way too short.

Bobby

xrobxscottx
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3 posted 2008-01-16 12:12 PM


I must disagree with the comment above - though it's merely an opinion.

You can live too long, if in fact what makes life worth living is no longer with you. If you no longer have anything to live for, if you no longer enjoy life and realize that there is no way out but death, then yes you can live too long.

The normal person, though, cannot live too long. Life is, for most people, way too short to think of yesterday, or to mourn the death of others. Celebrate their memory, and live life in honor of the ones that you love.

All in all this was a very good poem, and I enjoyed reading it a lot. Very good job

"Love is attained not merely through the sight, touch, or any of the senses; but through time."

-Robert Wilson

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