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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2008-01-05 08:33 PM


  Lost Illusions

under a vain,
indifferent moon

lost in an instant

love…

a flake of snow
in an angry Winter
  wind

the heart…

a ruined city
where all roads
lead only
to the past

the spirit...

a lonely spectre
forever chasing
dream-shadows
  
  

© Copyright 2008 Bruce E. Adams Jr. - All Rights Reserved
Goldenrose
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1 posted 2008-01-05 08:37 PM


Fine use of metaphor here and razor sharp imagery..thank you..

Goldenrose.

Ring out, wild bells, to the wild sky, ring out the old, ring in the new,ring out the false, ring in the true..A Lord Tennyson

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2 posted 2008-01-05 08:59 PM



TomMark
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3 posted 2008-01-05 09:15 PM



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Marchmadness
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4 posted 2008-01-05 10:11 PM


"A ruined city
where all roads
lead only
to the past."
I think this is very sad but
so pure in it's depth of thought.
                         Ida

Martie
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5 posted 2008-01-06 10:30 AM


Hello Bruce

"under a vain,
indifferent moon"

The first illusion...to think a moon holds power...I see here how it is the melencholy that makes the moon here, perhaps made even greater by the way it is so often looked at, through the eyes of love.  A poignant poem.  Sad.

Margherita
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6 posted 2008-01-06 05:48 PM


Man and Poet you got your sadness through powerfully!!

A temporary feeling I hope!

Whether we want or not we are projected into the future ... the soul knows and lights the Path.

Love,
Margherita

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