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Open Poetry #41

Time Wanders

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2008-01-02 06:47 PM

Time wanders...crossing bosomy wind swirled dunes
as starlit skies hum a lullaby to a pale yawning
moon...while wisps of bristling lions, howling owls
and Santa’s pale and swollen cheeks whisk away
a snowfall from a stalwart mountain’s jagged peak.

Winter...stoic in the fade of Fall to a morn of fresh
powder as the distant howl of a snarling wolf walks
softly upon layers of frosted feet....blindly awaiting
the trample of a Hare’s life....as a last breath lingers
on a blooded lip...as time wanders on....

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-01-02 06:59 PM

Dear Barry, there is such melancholy in your poem, it grips me.
Time wanders through the cycle of life and suddenly we realize how ephemeral everything is.
Sad, but beautiful.

Love and may the New Year bless you abundantly.
Margherita

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2008-01-02 07:01 PM

Thank you precious lady, may your new year
be all you have asked for....Barry

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2008-01-02 07:11 PM

I have no criticism for this poem, dear poet, over its content; I would realign some lines, but that is just me.

But in doing so, it would not be a Magnus-ificent poem...and I do believe I've coined a new word.

So goes 2008...on to the new!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2008-01-02 07:27 PM

Hip uh dip hooray....careful...you are
almost in copyright territory with the
name.... Our dear EA has her variation
of Magnus as well... I think they are
all cute...and it must be really digging
into your creative inkwell....deciding
not to make some recommendations...

From you, a pleasure I assure ya. thanx kj.

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