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Open Poetry #41

failure to thrive

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2007-07-29 08:40 AM

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What failed
to grow
of sinister frost
on a summer lawn

the golden rose
aborted

to the top
of that hill
i ran

giddy
and barefooted

crowned
by the sun's
pirouette

high
on the
glow

of your unsolicited
promise

gathering petals
i longed to bring
to you

i arrived
unaware of

how many
had already fallen

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2007-07-29 08:52 AM

ms inky, shall we just mulchdance? enjoyed this one

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2007-07-29 09:50 AM

Thrilled to see your words here again.
The way your style just falls on the page, gives such a feeling of petals falling from the blooms of summer.

Difficult emotions to put on the page, but you did very well here.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2007-07-29 05:47 PM

Nice writing...James

DennisTheMenace
Member

since 2005-09-04

Posts 240

4 posted 2007-07-29 06:27 PM

By the time I arrived unaware of so many petals had fallen
I could only stand and stare at the ground so beauty laden
If sooner I’d walk this path there would have been a bloom’s beauty
But it’s still there in aftermath to reconstruct what I didn’t see

thanks for the inspiration

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