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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2007-12-21 01:13 PM


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The broken ice
Heaves and laps
Along the snowy shore

Summer cabins
With windows boarded up
Seem as stoic monuments
To that other time
On the cliff above

Wind shushes through
The dark pine groves
While leafless birches
Creak a little and then
Are still

The sound
Of no one at the door

I hope it’s not too cold
Wherever you are

Take care


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© Copyright 2007 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-12-21 01:19 PM


I miss birches....but I do not miss the sound of no one at the door. What an excellent image! You have a gift, for images that touch the soul.

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secondhanddreampoet
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2 posted 2007-12-21 04:54 PM


yes...grand-fine imagery!:

"Summer cabins
With windows boarded up
...stoic monuments
To that other time..."

and particularly:

Wind...through
...dark pine groves
...leafless birches
Creak a little and then
Are still

The sound
Of no one at the door"

superb! [sustained applause!!]

aziza
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3 posted 2007-12-23 02:30 AM


John

Thank you.

Alison

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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4 posted 2007-12-23 02:32 AM


John... this is very beautiful!
Merry Christmas to you my friend
love RDB xx

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Marchmadness
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5 posted 2007-12-30 11:33 PM


The holidays seem to bring us deep thoughts and lovely memories. Well done , John.
                                  Ida

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