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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2007-12-18 12:35 PM



The ceiling thins
Like the way that our
Mouths close before
We let someone in.

The stuttering of feet,
The stutter of our hands,
Like leaves that perish
When snow rushes
Upon the veins
That shield them.

We never understand
Why the air we breathe
Can also plant a chill
Among the people we see.

The words we speak
They seem obsolete,
As if were children
With freckles
Freshly endowed upon our faces,
Scampering after one another,
Chasing a game,
Without a sweeping thought,
A meaning, or religion.

The words are lies,
Unless the stuttering turns to calm,
And the games, all of a sudden,
Carry a meaning.


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RogueandPoet
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since 2007-06-04
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Oregon
1 posted 2007-12-18 01:09 AM


Some nice imagery. I can't say that I "got' it but I did enjoy.
Lincoln
Member
since 2007-12-03
Posts 62
Earth
2 posted 2007-12-18 02:05 AM


Beautiful poem!!

"The words are lies,
Unless the stuttering turns to calm,
And the games, all of a sudden,
Carry a meaning."

I'm loving this.

"When your deepest thoughts are broken, keep on dreaming boy, cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die." -Shannon Hoon

TomMark
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since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133
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3 posted 2007-12-18 12:01 PM


"The ceiling thins
Like the way that our
Mouths close before
We let someone in."

This reminded me of snakes.

Then those following words were from "him".

my thought.

Beautiful poems again. You write very well.

Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan
4 posted 2007-12-18 05:26 PM



Appreciate the comments, happy you all enjoyed.

Tomer

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