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Recognizing Liam
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Recognizing Liam |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
he intrigued me with that tousled mop of black hair tied back in a kerchief and the sun-bleached mustache the arrogant air… noticing his arms, thick with cords of sinew always made me feel uncomfortable seeming more bionic than human not designed for delightful pickings of the mandolin but for manning the oars that rowed him home at night with a boat full of guitars and other strings and a belly full of tequila it sure made his eyes twinkle… I just saw a picture of the band from a year ago his face didn’t show but I recognized his elbow I wonder if he plays a harp now or is he busy tuning pitchforks I amuse myself, he would love that and he would sing it, if only he were here instead of missing from the stage |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
the sweet smell of nostalgia..sweet write  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Just another Pete Member
since 2007-12-06
Posts 74Scotland |
This is so full of memories and a lovely read. Enjoyed very much. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hey lady, I am happy to see your name here, and am fascinated by this unique portrait! Stick around for a while, willya? |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I wonder if he plays a harp now or is he busy tuning pitchforks I amuse myself, he would love that and he would sing it, if only he were here instead of missing from the stage From the title to the last word I was fascinated, dear Kahlil. Very well written intriguing story. Love, Margherita |
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Irish Member
since 2006-05-02
Posts 50Ft Benning |
I find this extremely well written . It has a storyline that intrigues the reader and your use of metaphor is excellent . I enjoyed this read very much |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Isn't it wonderful, how something oddly noticeable is what we remember best? Enjoyed this, Kahlil. Thank you! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Nostalgia at it's best. Nicely done! |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Thank you, dear PIP friends, for spending a moment in my nostalgic cloud. And welcome to Irish! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This is a truly incredible piece of writing, from the way you lay the story out in front of the reader with fine imagery and then leading right into a very bittersweet ending. Extremely enjoyed your talent here. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sitting on your nostalgic cloud was truly a lifting experience. Wonderfully written. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
hee hee, lifting experience, good one, Mysteria. And thank you, too, GS, for your special comments. |
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