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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Little angels However cold Dressed in white Ballerinas With crystal shoes Descending through The blue streetlamp light Gathering together For another year Silver sparkles The leafless boughs So life goes on Even under winter stars And soon at dawn We too will know As well Where rabbits were playing In the snow . |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
when George went to his oil stand. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Huan Yi- Lovely poem ARCTIC WIND |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
To me, this is (American) 'Zen Minimalism' beyond 'excellence!'... I don't have adequate descriptors for this grand-fine 'write!' (and, I am not often at a loss for words)... VERY serious, long-sustained hyper-applause!! [another poetic 'standing ovation!'] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Drop the first two lines, and start with: "Dressed in white Ballerinas With crystal shoes" Nice imagery. And loved the ending: "And soon at dawn We too will know As well Where rabbits were playing In the snow" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You must have been peeking in my yard this past week... I should have taken a picture for you  M |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What a lovely canvas you paint. |
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