Taking the Blade (Repost in Response to Serenity's Tarot Challenge - Three of Swords)

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Open Poetry #41

Taking the Blade (Repost in Response to Serenity's Tarot Challenge - Three of Swords)

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

0 posted 2007-12-09 10:19 PM

Blindfolded,
blind and folded
into creases of time,
long hours rehearsing,
this rhyme,
the thrower and
the assistant,
precision’s cold embrace.
Him throwing,
her frozen
daring not to breath,
to move,
to speak.
Dodging his blades
by remaining invisible,
untouched,
she is saved.
While he attempts to engrave her
with his being,
his attitudes and pessimism,
snappy moments
intended to carve deep wounds
of voided passion,
to swift flick her with his pain.
Today, she flinched
and bent into the dagger
taking it to the heart.
Balance gave way to age.
Steel through soft flesh scathed.
A bleeding heart remained
bound to the wheel
ever turning still,
and his sharpened will
penetrated every feel
she might have felt
had he stopped after one,
stopped the wheel that spun,
unbound her hands,
ungagged her tongue,
and removed the sting of what he’d done.
Blind and folded into time,
frozen forever now is his rhyme.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

1 posted 2007-12-09 11:05 PM

Iliana-

Very much Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2007-12-10 12:10 PM

Again I'm impressed, dear Jo, by your fantastic poetic skill.

A bleeding heart remained
bound to the wheel
ever turning still,
and his sharpened will
penetrated every feel
she might have felt

Such intensity. Karen too will be delighted!

Love,
Margherita

Just another Pete
Member

since 2007-12-06

Posts 74
Scotland

3 posted 2007-12-10 06:33 PM

Ooh I like that line "had he stopped after one" so much said there in so few words. Enjoyed very much.
Pete.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2007-12-11 08:35 AM

"Dodging his blades
by remaining invisible,
untouched,
she is saved."

~ Whew! I'm pleased that there can be something positive about this card ~ which for me personally, is the most dreaded one to crop up when I do a reading. Thankfully, it seldom ever raises its ugly head!

Love to you, sweet poetess ~ and sorceress! lol

Linda

chickoo007
Member

since 2007-11-06

Posts 70
India

5 posted 2007-12-11 09:45 AM

Today, she flinched
and bent into the dagger
taking it to the heart.

Oh man what can i say of these lines!!!!
I felt a sense of nervousness and anxiety as i read through your poem
Simply amazing!!!!!!!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2007-12-11 09:52 AM

Well now.

This is a dark one. (Did I miss this one, or was I just "gone fishin" again?)

This is most appropriate my dearest jo jo!

Sharp, but to the point?

grin

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