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Love's Intentions
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Love's Intentions |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! 
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Love’s ‘intentions’ I long to wander far in twilight and the dusky morning mist that sleeps in soft sylvan glades, with smoke and chimney tunes ascending… from some mystic cottage nestled on the edge of Time, (near a flowing-marble turquoise sea) until the last moon-shadow fears melt with the dawn’s surprise in a sun-emblazoned dream where only two ‘imperatives’ still remain for me… to contemplate all the ‘possibilities’ of a cloud, and…the conundrum of Love’s ‘intentions’! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
BEAUTIFUL! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and the dusky morning mist that sleeps in soft sylvan glades, with smoke and chimney tunes ascending… from some mystic cottage nestled on the edge of Time, ~*~ First, I simply am attuned to the word sylvan... secondly, you made me think of Brigadoon... Bravo! |
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xxjbabe101 New Member
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2 |
this is really good. your descriptions paint a beautiful and exact picture in my mind |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
Within the sacred space of your poetry you’ve created the sacred space of this vision. Here, it seems, you re-create the mythical Garden in your way, to your own specifications, excluding all but ... genuine Nature and Love. Poet as Magician. Fantastic. [This message has been edited by ArtSolstice (07-27-2007 11:01 PM).] |
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Hyaunt Member
since 2007-07-12
Posts 74 |
always wonderful! Hyuant |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Love is without thought or intentions . |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
...would that that were true...I completely disagree! |
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gwaihir Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 58Sub-tropical, USA |
Nice write, shdp. I was going to ask why you used the apostrophe's. I think the meaning would still be quite clear without them. But when the comment window opened, and I can see that in your message about critiques that you use them a lot.  |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Do you mean ellipses: (...) or apostrophes?! |
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Devious Intellectual Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 112 |
like this alot, parts were over my head, but for the most part it was written very skillfully and i could relate in a way |
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gwaihir Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 58Sub-tropical, USA |
Silly me. I really meant the sets single quotation marks you used on intentions and some of the other words. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
the only explanation I can offer is as follows: I sometimes include ellipses (...) in hopes that it will signal a longer pause (for extended thought?!) than just a comma might, to the reader; I use parentheses ( ) around certain lines that are rather like asides...or additional images and/or thoughts perhaps not absolutely essential to the poem; I use single quotes sometimes just to make a particular word stand out [especially if it might have more than one meaning (via private interpretation) for the reader; and, thereby likely change the meaning and/or impact of the poem significantly as a whole] |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
I'm trying to imagine love without thought or intentions… Just my opinion, but folks might want to be thoughtful about love… Love without thought or intentions is responsible for a lot of social problems (!) [This message has been edited by ArtSolstice (07-29-2007 01:18 PM).] |
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Berenice Junior Member
since 2007-07-18
Posts 18 |
wonderful writing. There are many, many intentions after the feeling of love. May they all be poetic. |
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poeticdestiny Junior Member
since 2007-07-29
Posts 19Georgia |
Wonderfully written. Very beautiful. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
love is such a funny word sometime....  ~~**~~ |
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