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Open Poetry #41

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fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

0 posted 2007-11-12 06:25 PM

In the eyes of a broken soul
In place of a heart where there is now an empty hole
Lies a greedy little creature
It is the master of evil: a suicidal preacher
There are endless tears of despair
And the silent secret of wanting to share
It let’s stinging tears run inside and out
Confusing them without a doubt, fear and anger it unleashes out
It then creeps up your spine and with its little voice says “commit suicide”
They consume the advice to rid themselves of pain or a shameful side they want to hide
They cut themselves from wrist to wrist
Hoping they did it right so that they no longer exist
They consume every pill in sight
Because they have no strength to carry on the unknowing strategic fight
They tie a rope to anything sturdy
To wipe their existence before or after the age of thirty
It doesn’t let them see how valuable they are
It doesn’t let them know that happiness is not that far
Depression is a psychological game
Either you win or the greedy little creature gets all the fame!
Written by: NR

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2007-11-13 04:11 PM

Welcome to Pip!

This is a highly dramatic write, being the theme you choose extremely delicate.

More than a game, depression is an illness I think and if people are helped adequately they get a chance to exit the black tunnels.

It doesn’t let them see how valuable they are
It doesn’t let them know that happiness is not that far

May everybody be able to hear the inner voice of love.

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2007-11-15 04:18 PM

Nice writing...James

Gumpy
Member

since 2007-11-06

Posts 143
Canada

3 posted 2007-11-15 04:23 PM

WOW.
"in the eyes of a broken soul
In place of a heart where there is now an empty hole
Lies a greedy little creature
It is the master of evil: a suicidal preacher"

A Great poem.

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