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Open Poetry #41

Dance Club Saturday Night

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2007-11-06 06:17 AM

Dance Club Saturday Night

Gaslight torches
flicker within
the breeze as
dancers sway with
rhythm and ease.
Locals and tourist
in floral shirts
and party dresses
share laughs and fun,
hugs and caresses.
On the veranda I spot
a cockroach and a gecko
climbing the wall,
as if the beat of the music
from the dance club calls.
"Feel It Up, Little Darling."
the words and the beat
take the crowd into the night,
a big Samoan bouncer moves
in to break up a fight.
The band takes a break
and poses for pictures
with some local girls
that are party fixtures.
Leaving I see a woman so fine,
but no where near as fine as mine.

JamesLee
06November
2007
Mai Tai Bar
Ala Moana Mall
Waikiki

marcel
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 660
az, usa

1 posted 2007-11-06 12:49 PM

like how you captured the night as a photographer would. nice write.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2007-11-06 05:24 PM

Very nice, dear James!
And I love the ending line, which shows that you kept your priorities well in sight.

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2007-11-06 08:30 PM

"Leaving I see a woman so fine,
but no where near as fine as mine."

~ Hold that thought! lol

Linda

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2007-11-09 04:09 PM

"big Samoan bouncer moves
in to break up a fight."

Brings back some old memories...

Nice write James.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2008-06-27 02:39 AM

Thank you...James

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

6 posted 2010-08-13 08:46 PM

Good description of a saturday night at a dance club complete with a big Samoan bouncer.

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