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Brian23
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since 2007-11-03
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Belfast, Ireland

0 posted 2007-11-03 02:32 PM



Thou the beholder of a form so fine
Ye found me dead without reason
Pass me a cup of that subtle wine
Then I shall commit high treason
Towards the gods I shall head
Choking on death with every stride
Thy Sword shall be committed to red
I shall stop not until one has truly died
Keep hold of that precious seed
So it may see more suns than I
Upon him came death as he decreed
But along with him the king did die
Now I can live for many years free
With my young son alongside me

My attempt at a sonnet

© Copyright 2007 Brian Rooney - All Rights Reserved
aziza
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since 2006-07-09
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
1 posted 2007-11-03 04:21 PM


So sad and beautiful.
Thank you for sharing your first with us.

And -- welcome to PiP.

Alison

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
2 posted 2007-11-04 01:20 AM



welcome Brian

I enjoyed the read very much


Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
3 posted 2007-11-04 06:29 AM


Brian... welcome to our blue pages.. I hope to read more of your work.. I enjoyed your first post here.. RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2007-11-06 01:41 PM


First attempts are always welcome, Brian.
Welcome to Passions! I hope you "flower"
within the blue halls, for your words truly
have some passion burning beneath them.

Please! Check your email for a Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

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