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Lifetime lost
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Lifetime lost |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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There rises up a sensed despair at precious moments lost when easier it was to lie on a bed not made for love than venture up the mountainside of all I felt inside. A mountain nonetheless is here and like a grasping monster wrings out the price for mindlessness from the fibres of a being and weaves a deep regret into each and every breath. Mocking mountains stand amused as shivers come unbidden with the gusty winds of sorrow and in the heat of wondering whether late is now too late laughter bubbles deep within the bowels of solid rock. There’s a river at the base of mountainous dislike but the waters of emotion a benevolent protector because the heartless too unyielding to cross the great divide. The mountain mocks and taunts I bow but then arise; ‘tis nothing but a lifetime lost and there are more besides! Helen / 30 October 2007 |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If you wanted to shorten this, the first verse says it all. But I'm glad you didn't shorten it, Helen. I like it. Particularly... There rises up a sensed despair at precious moments lost when easier it was to lie on a bed not made for love than venture up the mountainside of all I felt inside. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Dear Helen, this is a fantastic write, with many lines of poetic heights. Enjoyed it deeply. Love, Margherita  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well done |
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Shadow_Singer Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 51 |
Mountains are made for climbing, but still it is sometimes good to go around when possible. Enjoyed |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"The mountain mocks and taunts I bow but then arise; ‘tis nothing but a lifetime lost and there are more besides!" Nice write Helen. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, I'm sorry - I didn't acknowledge anyone's comments. Thanks JL for bringing it up again so I can say, "Thank you everyone". Hmm? Could it be that we can really get second chances in life? |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
No doubt, about that, dear Helen!! Substitute the inside rainy weather with the sunshine of your trust. Love, Margherita |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Good advice, dear Margherita! Thank you so much! Hugs ~ Helen |
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