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Open Poetry #41

Blank inside....or too much to hide?

Sexy_Tator_Tot
Junior Member

since 2007-08-31

Posts 42
Arkansas

0 posted 2007-09-28 12:32 PM

I sit down and stare at a blank sheet of paper
trying hard to focus on my heart
as my pen begins to flow
my are thoughts taken over by emotion -
my mind is now in overload .
the ink becomes smeared
with every dropping tear
scared to face my own life's journey
i stop myself before my pen reveals to much
and tell myself
nothing is too tuff to overcome
the thought of losing makes me fight
without the defeat
who would i be

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

1 posted 2007-09-29 08:21 AM

we learn more about ourselves and who we are (or could be) when we fail, IMO.

Good write though. The feeling of being penned up and restrained really comes through. But we never know our limits until we're tested.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2007-10-01 04:33 PM

Poetry can be very revealing without revealing very personal situations. I think you have the soul of a poet. That's the main ingredient. Some of the things I try to concentrate on when I write are,
proof reading, spelling and polishing.
Ida

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2007-10-02 02:19 AM

"I sit down and stare at a blank sheet of paper"

~ I certainly know what that is like!

"as my pen begins to flow
my are thoughts taken over by emotion"

~ Some of the best poetry is written when that occurs.

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