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Open Poetry #41

Mellow Yellow

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

0 posted 2007-09-25 10:25 PM

Mellow Yellow

He took a trip,
without leaving his perch.

Imagined himself,
atop a grand old birch.

From there he could see,
the steeples tall,

of Dublin, Cork,
and Donegal.

View the ships,
in Galway Bay,

Or look to Wicklow,
as it greeted the day.

Then he'd sing,
of the Emerald Isle,

a lullaby,
that made you smile.

this is a poem I wrote about an
Irish pen-friends Canary who he
fed hemp seeds to so he'd sing.

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

1 posted 2007-09-26 02:03 PM

And did he sing?? loved it. "late"

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2007-09-26 02:09 PM

Moondogz,
My constuctive criticism is "keep writing." I just loved this one.
Ida

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

3 posted 2007-09-26 07:16 PM

Hey late, thanks for your comments.
Not sure if he ever sang, never heard
back from my pen-friend after the "mellow
yellow" poem...maybe it was the accompanying
cartoon I drew of the canary with a joint hanging out of his beak and wearing a headband that put him off..guess I'll never
know.

Thanks Ida, very kind and thoughtful of you
to say so.
moon.

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