Open Poetry #41 |
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Identity Crises |
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PoppaLoco Member
since 2007-09-23
Posts 83EU, NL, Limburg |
Growing tired of the fight To keep the world outside and yourself pure Not wanting to cry asleep at night You let it go, and close your eyes Losing track of who you are But with so much less pain to endure Their sweet appreciation, so unaware That you are paying a price Because waking up one day To find you are caught up in this lure Want to go looking for what’s gone astray But since long, you’ve been lost below the ice |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Interesting topic Enjoyed ! NEwbie to newbie ARCTIC WIND |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a powerfully 'real' write! I am particularly fond of the ending line! applause!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Growing tired of the fight To keep the world outside and yourself pure" ~ A never-ending battle for many. Enjoyed this exploration on self-identity. ![]() EA |
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PoppaLoco Member
since 2007-09-23
Posts 83EU, NL, Limburg |
Thanks everyone, it was one of those days when I realised what expensive clothes and stupid jokes I was boasting just for success. Pops |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Want to go looking for what’s gone astray But since long, you’ve been lost below the ice" excellent work Pops and your remark is amazing... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I found this write striking. As our culture makes progress a focus, we all struggle with the measure of success within that framework. So very often, disregarding the simple pleasures of living as our authentic selves. Nature shows the framework and blueprint of our intended realm...I think that's what brings balance for me... I could appreciate the message in this insightful write. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hello Pop It is hard to maintain a balance in protecting ourselves from negative outside influances. It sometimes feels easier, to build walls around that lovely inside person, to protect it. But in doing so, much knowledge and insight can be missed. I enjoyed your thought-filled poem. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
I think that most of us feel caught by that lure you speak of, coming back to yesterdays where joy was ours; I am afraid has passed. Rekindling the once memories and again finding the drive to search is the key. Each day brings us more choices and not matter the circumstance a light can be found at the end of each tunnel. Enjoyed the read my friend, thanks for sharing. Rick Because waking up one day To find you are caught up in this lure Want to go looking for what’s gone astray But since long, you’ve been lost below the ice |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So glad to read this again, new meaning seeping in... Self definition lays in the lap of victories hard won. I found this thought through your works. Thanks. ![]() Now write more ~Grin |
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