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The Betrayal
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The Betrayal |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
THE BETRAYAL In a recurring dream of childhood That unfolds like a blossoming flower. I return again and again To that gray, foreboding tower, Standing like an aging sentinel Amid the ruins of an old estate Where hunted and alone, A wounded soldier waits.... And I know I must not fail him As I slip past the iron gate. What a stark and desolate scene Where brooding winter lingers; Bare trees seem to reach for the tower With their crooked, bony fingers. These ruins that once were my castle Covered with fairy dust, Now my secret destination Known only to one I trust. As I approach the tower I am fearful For I sense a danger here But while war has raged around me I have become accustomed to fear. I climb the broken staircase, I enter the tower room And I know from his grave condition, This will be a soldier's tomb. Our eyes meet in desperation Across this room where once I played For I hear the sound of approaching troops And I know.... I have been betrayed! Ida Werrett |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ida~ When reading you, I ALWAYS find something uniquely original - 'brooding winter lingers' It is a treasure to traipse through the words of you~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank You, Marge, I always look forward to your comments. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I felt my heartbeat quickening in this powerful piece ... those steps in wartime were terrible! Great write. Love, Margherita |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank you for your comments. I wrote this poem about a dream I have had several times in my life and the feelings that came with it. |
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PoppaLoco Member
since 2007-09-23
Posts 83EU, NL, Limburg |
I wish I could put my old dreams into such beautiful, vivid language. What a sad thing to dream though. Hope it didn't leave bad impressions on you, it would look like a bad omen! Pops |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
wow Marchmadness, that made the chills run up my spine...powerful stuff!!! moon. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank you for your interest and kind comments. I have had the dream several times over the years and have learned to live with it. Ida |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Marchmadness- i have always looked forward for your poems YAH! ARCTIC WIND |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank you Arctic Wind. |
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moondogz Member
since 2007-05-01
Posts 397Great White North |
Ida, I thought you were probably tapping into a previous life, when I read this poem. Also I thought of how your poems seem to touch people at a universal cellular level...keep on posting. moon. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank you Moondogz, That thought occured to me as well. |
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