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Jitterbug Princess
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Jitterbug Princess |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada 
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Jitterbug princess, bopping hard to acid house, She has no IPod. Once a week I pass by this street-side train wreck, I have to look - it’s brutal. The jive vultures hawk their wares discreetly. I know who they are they can see me, too. Their clients are pockmarked, filthy, skeletal in their need. Whining, yelling, crying They're oblivious to everything but their well-kept pets. They resemble them, too, as they gibber and caper their hunger satisfied - for now. The broken ones litter the sidewalk in lines – pieces of their lives surround them in gunpowder starbursts. Jitterbug princess jaywalks – foot slams on the brakes, hands slam on my hood. Hoffman screeches from behind a raging smile, “I’m waulkin’ hee-ya!” Our eyes meet for an eternal moment and I cry in anguish. I still remember the last time I saw her gaze, eight years ago screaming from my mirror. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
my gosh this is amazing..... |
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Jezzika Member
since 2005-01-05
Posts 154work |
OMG!! This was incredible.. I LOVED IT!!!!!! One trillion dollars could buy a heart a soul ~ Anti-Flag |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
Thank you, Sea. Your response is gratifying. Thank you Jezzika, as well. It was meant for a reaction and am very pleased to have elicted yours. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Philips Highway here in J-ville. *nod* graphic depiction. well done. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Powerful write... grabs attention. Good Job! MoonShadow . |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
Thank you Susan and MoonShadow. I'm very glad I came here. |
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gwaihir Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 58Sub-tropical, USA |
Hey BBG: Long time no hear. This is such a sad walk on the other side. The last 2 lines just kill me. Your old friend "ALT" now flying high as "gwaihir" See you around. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Wow! I am glad that you came here too. Most powerful and captivating! A |
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Bronzeage Member
since 2007-07-20
Posts 197 |
Vivid imagery and well constructed. Very well done. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
BBGrrl...Shocking write, but reality is shocking sometime. I just don't see how some people think everything is roses in the world, when there is so much more they turn their backs to. Sort of goes along with my poem of yesterday you replied to...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
simply fantastic! "Ah! my Be-loved, fill the cup that clears |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hello, my fellow Canadian! The strong dose of reality, certainly packs a wallop to one's sensibilities! ~ and solar plexus! Powerful writing ~ and very well done! Giving you a warm, welcoming hug, Earth Angel  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
incredibly vivid as a deputy i see the sweet and the sad sides of life |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I can only echo the words of others, a very well written write, and a jam up ending. |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
how exquisitely gripping this is an amazing and brutal write, bravo! ~Sheli By words the mind is winged |
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