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One Plus One |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
I don’t count the distance, don’t measure the miles Of how far your touch is, your kisses, your smiles. I don’t count tomorrows and yesterdays gone But I know in my heart that you are the one. I’ve clung to my sorrows, lived buried in pain. Burnt bridges to ashes then lit them again. Watched silks turn to sackcloth caught tears for fun, All the time knowing that you are the one. I watched as the seconds ticked my life away As I juggled each hour to fill out each day, Catching minutes of maybes and flashes of sun Content in the knowledge that you are the one. Alone I sit cradling dreams in the night As they melt in the darkness to smother the light Of the could have and should haves that I left undone And the knowing that you don’t think I am the one. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I don’t count the distance, don’t measure the miles ===================== Burnt bridges to ashes then lit them again. Watched silks turn to sackcloth ==================== Catching minutes of maybes and flashes of sun ====================== As they melt in the darkness to smother the light ======================= Of the could have and should haves that I left undone And the knowing that you don’t think I am the one. ====================== oh my my my....... I see they write some mighty fine poetry in Whoville  so many great lines in this cadenced gem... Catching minutes of maybes and flashes of sun (iwihwt) a bittersweet, twist of irony wrapped in rhyme...well done Grinchster!!  Writing poetry is easy. You need only stare at a piece of blank paper until your forehead bleeds. |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Nicely written, enjoyed. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I usually don't like "love lost" poetry much. I guess because I think so many people have real problems and sorrows, but iI like this and think it is well written. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mr. Grinch, I felt the ache in this one. ~ May your dreams be sweet and be reflections of your reality.   EA |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
this poem is winderful well, enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
quote: That’s generally a good rule in fact I don’t like it much either but it is useful writing practice if you have ten minutes to kill. You can try out different forms, rhyme schemes or meter using a subject that’s universally understood, it also allows you to try to capture and convey emotion, which is a neat trick if you can master it. In my case I’m still just practicing but thanks for reading and all the replies. |
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