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Keys on my Key Chain
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Keys on my Key Chain |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Keys on my Key Chain There are keys on my key chain that I have never seen before They don’t start my car They don’t fit into the front door They seem to glisten in the sun and are warm to my finger’s touch But, they don’t open any locks These keys don’t seem to do much I don’t know why I keep them I don’t know where they came from But, they shine like molten gold under the warmth of summer sun The more I look upon them the more my mind can almost see that these keys are here for a reason Maybe they are meant to remind me Because when I see them I remember that you love me and that you care Yes, they hang there for a reason and that’s to remind me you are there You are there when I need you You are there to wipe my tears You are there when I need a shoulder You are there to ease my fears There are keys on my key chain that I have never seen before I have learned they are very special for they open up your heart doors --- Alison [This message has been edited by aziza (07-15-2007 04:27 PM).] |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
swwweet... so much unsaid comes with those keys...  enjoyed, g "...Never regret anything that made you smile..." |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
love need keys Alison and you have written it well... |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Very nice Alison, about to add some keys to my chain, if that is all it takes. Enjoyed the read my friend. Rick |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
I loved this! Keys as reminders of the ones who love us, as they are the ones who unlock our heart's doors... nice! Freedom Now |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
beautiful poem and and very interest topic made me think always a beauty enjoyed |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like the sincerity of this...James |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms az, enjoyed this purespeak ms!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
May those special keys be with special you, forever and ever...  You deserve them ~ and the love that they represent.Never fear walking through any doors that those love keys will open! A precious piece of poetic you! Loving hug, Linda |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Aww. I really liked this. My set is weighty, complete with remotes. Pretty soon I'll have to drag them along in a wagon, but after reading you, I find them less hassling. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine Romantic 'write'! applause!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
My thanks to each of you for reading and seeing the keys on my keychain and counting your own. A |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Alison, Just spent an hour catching up on all your prose and a lot of your poetry. Lately it's not often I get time to fit this in and right now I am again waiting for a couple of people to call around to bring me back to working again! First, can I say how much I admire your writing and the 'inner knowledge' within it gained by life's 'experiences'. I was drawn to this piece of work, not only because I am the world's worse for building up keys on my keyring which I have no idea what they ever did, but also because I feel that your 'keychain' is what I often refer to as my 'toolchest'. During life we pick up a lot of skills and knowledge that we carry around with us and subconciously use when dealing with new situations. It is this that makes us what we are, but usually we are not actually looking for the key that fits the lock, we just use it. I spend a lot of time helping people identify their abilites and recognize them in order to quickly deal with things and situations that happen in their work. This reminded me of your keychain (my toolbox). Once we can easily identify each key (tool) it means we are more able to use it to help us. Beauty is, the more you identify, and the more you do, the bigger the keychain (toolbox} becomes. Although it may become heavy to handle it does make opening new pathways easier though. I suppose what I am saying is take every key you have and find out how you got it, surprising what benefit that will give you! Oh, and maybe some of those 'purchases' weren't only made by your sister... believe in the magic. Ivor [This message has been edited by ivordavies (01-12-2008 11:20 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm sure glad this one came back since I missed it the first time around I remember when my keychain was like that, but sometimes reminders are painful now I only carry the keys I need |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I also missed this before. I'd so like to have a key chain like yours but I guess I'm not meant to have the right key to open the right heart door! Guess I'll just stick to the practical ones. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Ali... this is lovely - what a wonderful way you described this... very beautiful love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Yvette Junior Member
since 2007-12-08
Posts 19Texas, United States |
Very rare indeed that I log onto any poetry or literary forum and feel truly and I mean truly truly moved by a piece. I can only express how balanced in its rhyme, rhythm, metaphor, literary devices...a pleasant dance on the fence of a very interesting thought and an even more interesting feeling. I do not give compliments like this lightly. You write much better than I. I am humled by this poem. Yvette |
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Jaime Fradera Senior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 843Where no tyranny is tolerable |
A wonderful way of being "with you" in a vicarious way. Who doesn't need a confidant and friend ... even if some nights it just has to be a fantasy ... The keys represent magic marbles, springs that can be drawn upon again and again, and yet they are always full. In my house I have some "sacred objects" that keep me connected and remind me of a friend. and now, when the world has been a bit too much, and I am feeling a bit too lonely or ignored, it is possible to be with you in a vicarious way. I want to go to sleep but can't. |
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tonyV Junior Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 36 |
Those words hit to the inside. You can feel them throughout the heart. I can't help but feel a sense of tranquility after reading that. Bravo. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Alison, What a charming write. It touches the heart of every reader, in ways that were unknown to them until they read you. That's what poetry is all about. Getting to the inner core of the possible thought... gone unspoken. Well done, dear. Very well done. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
My thanks go out to each of you and I am going to respond individually as you have touched me. I need some time to form some of my thoughts. Thank you. A |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
I love this. Such a simple a simple & original image but it carries so much meaning... |
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Im not a poet and i no it Junior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 14uk, peterborough |
sooo Much Meaning with "Keys" |
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xrobxscottx Junior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 31United States |
I really liked this poem! There was one or two parts of it that you could edit to make it better, but all in all this was great. Thanks for posting it! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Alison, I had not seen this before, I am glad I got to read it now, because it is really a beautiful thought you develop here. Your heart is a beautiful place, it is aware of the gifts it has received and able to feel the gratitude and to express it. How precious. Love ... and a golden hug Margherita |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Ivor, It was a surprise to see this poem make an appearance again. It always catches me a bit off guard when a poem I write comes back to the top months after I have posted it. But, you made this poem more special to me. I have enjoyed your poetry since you came to PiP - and to know that you seek mine out all is a thrill. That may sound a bit ... hmmm ... trite, but it is true. I remember how you asked me to take a poem and develop it into prose. Did it become two or three posts? I can't remember and am too lazy to go look. Writing about my past and my father is not hard, but I might confuse people. I learned long ago that he was two people - and my poetry often reflects my feelings about both parts of him. I do believe in magic. I do believe that magic comes from within and we can only cultivate it within ourselves. I think that your toobox and my keys are remarkably similar. They may grow heavy at times, but the burden is lessened by the wonder that they both bring. I have no intentions of losing my keys - and even if they seem to lessen, I think they just get set aside for a time. They remain with us. Thank you for reading, and thank you even more for taking the time to write such a thoughtful response. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Dixie, I think that the keys are always with us. We polish them, hold them close and set them aside - but, they never leave. We just have to find them when we misplace them. I am glad that you are back. I missed the hell out of you, girly. xoxoxo A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Helen The best thing about my keychain is that there is always room for more keys! It's not a chain for one person - it's a chain for all people who grow to mean so much to me. I bet that your keychain is a lot bigger than you think. I read your responses and poetry and I see a beautiful and kind woman .. I bet that more people have you on their chain than you think. Thank you for reading and writing, xoxoxo A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
RDB Thank you, my friend. You make me smile so often. Love, Ali |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Yvette, I am humbled by your response. You truly amazed me with your words - and thrilled me. Thank you, Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Jaime, Thank you. It is wonderful to read your responses - and I am enjoying getting to know you a bit. You made me smile. Thank you for that - and for sharing your thoughts. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Tony Thank you and, again, welcome to PiP. Your words are a gift to me. Thank you. A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Sunshine, I love your name in here for you truly are "sunshine" in my day. Silly sounding, huh. Well, your words mean a lot to me and I thank you for the help that you have given me. I am glad that this poem made an impression on you - and I KNOW that your keychain is heavy. Hugs, A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Simon, I am content. There is nothing like learning that a poem makes an impression on another. You make me happy. Thank you. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Im not a poet Thank you for taking the time to respond and let me know that this poem hit you on some level. Welcome to PiP and my appreciation to you. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Rob Thank you and I know what you mean. When this poem made its way back to the top the other day, I cleaned it up a bit. Thank you for sharing your thoughts so honestly. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Margherita Thank you for enveloping me in the 'beauty of you'. You, my friend, make me smile and I feel the love that surrounds you. Thank you and xoxoox Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
g, I think the keys speak for themselves ... very softly in our ear when we need to hear them the most. Thank you for being the first to write to this poem of mine. A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Kate, I agree that love needs keys - and we just have to tend them and cherish them when we are offered them. Thank you. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Rick, It don't take much (grins) - and I would hazard a bet that your keychain is pretty full now. Thank you, my friend. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Moonkist You understand the magic of it all! Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Drauntz I hope that your keychain is growing. You showed a lot of love here in PiP. A PS - Does anyone know where Drauntz went? I miss her. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
James I think you totally understand this poem - and I think I smile when I see you have read a poem of mine. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
D You know - yeah, you know. You smile me, friend. A |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Linda, I may carry keys, but people like you make them. You are so filled with love that it shows in every word that you write. I feel a loving hug in every response you write to me -- and you are a wonderful teacher through your loving actions. Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
rwood, How lucky you are! You must give love to have so many keys to carry. Yep, I think that is the way it works. Alison PS - a burro could help carry them. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Bruce, Your applause are sometimes what sustains me and keeps me driving on. Thank you for your kindness and support. Your friend, Alison |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Dear vandana, Thank you for this response - and for all the poems of mine that you have read and left kind words and a smile on. You make my day so often. Alison |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Just rediscovered this voluminous post and peeked in to see ... I think your individual replies are a gift to each one and surely all will be happy to read them! Up you go. Love and hugs and again thank you. Margherita |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I've also just come back. Thank you for your kind comments to me, Alison, and Margherita is right. Your individual replies are a gift to each. Yeah, I guess my key chain is heavy but the one I really, really need isn't there to be seen. The others, however, enable survival in ... the jungles of Africa, South Africa, where concrete rules the day and crime is here to stay. Back to the top! Helen |
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