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I Write Rubbish |
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Fairplay Member
since 2007-01-15
Posts 222England |
Don’t tell me this is rubbish Just read it and forget I will think I am doing fine With nice remarks I get I know It don’t take poets To Pen a Rhyme in verse Though oft I’ve seen the praises For stuff I thought much worse If you reply with something nice By taking time to pause Should I then just be obliged? To do the same on yours? Of course with different levels Replies are quite a treat The higher class ignore the low? Like beggars in the street Few rules then is the answer? And honesty is best! Or else the site will crumble Just look at all the rest Eric Lance Davies |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Eric, many of us here read many more than we respond to. Some of us know each other from meeting in real or from the years on here. But just because one responds to someone doesn't mean they will always respond back. Some have limited time on here. The nice thing about this site is you aren't obligated to do anything although responding to a few others each day before posting one of your own is always a nice gesture and helps others to look you up and get to know your writing. I just am responding to your words of your poem if they are meant for a reaction.  M |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
enjoyed the honesty. this is good sifting of your soul  g |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Well, you got my attention - while I liked your poem, I loved the title. Thanks for expressing your thoughts honestly too. A |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
The title got my attention, I like the poem and think it's funny (wouldn't say so if I didn't.) and no, you don't have to respound to any of mine. Ida |
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CudMonk Junior Member
since 2007-11-28
Posts 21 |
Woohoo! Kudos for taking the time to write something that can inspire an evil grin. One of the only gripes I have with poetry websites is that on occasion they can turn into journal sites... written in poetry, which is completely fine, although it can become a bit monotonous to read the same themes over and over. I like the originality. It made me chuckle. I'm shutting up now. Cheers Adam |
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CudMonk Junior Member
since 2007-11-28
Posts 21 |
Okay, I'm going to be absolutely ridiculous and post another reply. I just went and read a bunch of your poems, and wanted to make a suggestion - feel free to take it for what you think it's worth. In my humble opinion, sir, your strength as a writer lies in your imagination. Your images are excellent and your metaphors are enviable. Yet, I cannot help but feel as though the rhyming dampens some of the potential. Have you ever tried writing in free verse? Some people just love rhyme, and that's cool - but, as I said, I think you have a gifted imagination, and I would be interested in seeing how that could be geared with less restraint. Just a thought. Cheers Adam |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
And I'm going to agree with Adam... g |
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Fairplay Member
since 2007-01-15
Posts 222England |
I don't write to pass the time But more to search my mind I wont write all I think For some of it's unkind I try to be a diplomat Then fall far from the mark I'm going to come Back as a Dog Just wag my tail and Bark Eric Lance Davies |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Eric, You said that before on a response to me! But: I read most of your rubbish and I am not always kind. I usually tell you what's really on my mind. I know that you write for yourself and do not seek replies, to pamper your own ego is never your demise. But you write to get reaction and make the others think, like me you stretch the limits and do not mind the stink. A challenge or a chuckle, or perhaps to wind us up, whatever way you tell it there's plenty in your cup. I've heard your other language, as some would have you write, but take a tip from one who knows you'd put them all to fright. So please just stick to rhyming it softens your intent, for left alone to write free verse some egos would be bent! |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
How about blank verse, or might that simply evoke blank stares? Best, Jim |
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