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Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

0 posted 2007-01-31 09:23 AM

Whatever this is
refuses to express itself
and I am left with this feeling
of hanging in mid-air
but all the same,
it remains there.

It is easy for you to say
that you understand,
that all I have to do
is take your hand

but I am weak
and my heart is whispering
not this

no, not this....

All of the good intentions
in the world
can't make this become something
understood;
and, I know that if you could

you would
do everything in your power
to ease my pain
to make me smile

to help me feel sane,

to comfort my heart
and calm my fears.

It's not your fault
that merely the sound
of your voice
brings me to tears

and I know,

yes I know

that you truly mean well
but whatever this is
has got me under its spell.

This whatever
is something that comes
from deep within;

I don't know when it will stop

or when and if ever
I’ll find me again.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2007-01-31 09:44 AM

Donna, you write in free verse with the best of pip's poets!

~ and you emote with the best of them as well!

May the winds in your life be as gentle as you yourself are!

Loving hug,

Linda

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2007-01-31 09:50 AM

whoa, very very nice...really enjoyed the adventure of this...

well written

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2007-01-31 09:58 AM

Your words have always had a way to touch deeply the heart....there have been times when I have felt this way but I could never have put it as perfectly as you have....Well done...**big hugs**

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2007-01-31 10:23 AM

1derful write

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2007-01-31 11:08 AM

mirror...yes

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2007-01-31 02:56 PM

thanks so much, everyone.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2007-01-31 07:46 PM

Man, it does seem that January
  was the month of the "lost"
     and I know this feeling
        very well...

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

8 posted 2007-02-01 11:33 AM

You and I, both, Donna. I have been trying to find myself for so long, I'm about to just give up.

PEBBLES
Member

since 2006-10-30

Posts 69
South Australia, Australia

9 posted 2007-02-01 11:56 AM

I am so moved by your sad ink. 3.30 AM. in South Australia, I will not sleep tonight. My thoughts are with you.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2007-02-01 02:12 PM

Donna...I think you have found you...I see it very clearly in this poem....it's lovely!

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

11 posted 2007-02-01 06:32 PM

Donna, I feel certain you will find you again! (Could be something karmic.) I so get this poem....I really, really do, and I'm saving it. *hugs*....jo

JLHunter
Senior Member

since 2006-10-08

Posts 557
CA United States

12 posted 2007-02-01 08:28 PM

Hi, Donna (well, that's what everyone else is calling you!

).

Wow. That is an existential work if I ever saw one. Where do I begin and you end?

It's nicely worded, with an excellent rhyme and flow to it.

I really enjoyed this one.

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

13 posted 2007-02-02 12:29 PM

"but I am weak
and my heart is whispering
not this

no, not this...."

Ahhh gentle Donna
you grabbed my very soul with this

hugs to you...

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

14 posted 2007-02-04 09:30 AM

you are all so very good to me, and I thank you and appreciate you, each.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2007-02-04 10:03 PM

Nice writing...James

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

16 posted 2007-02-04 10:08 PM

Most excellent Donna!

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Shelley
Member

since 2000-01-27

Posts 263
Ohio, USA

17 posted 2007-02-04 10:45 PM

this is lovely .... i can't quite explain the calming that it brought over me ...

very nicely done

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

18 posted 2007-04-17 03:21 PM

had to take a minute and come back to this one to thank you all, and to smile...

thank you, each.

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