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An Empty Void
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An Empty Void |
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MindBodySoul Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 196NJ |
 An empty void A darkness I only understand Alone withstanding the test of time Feeling tired all of a sudden Of trying and trying And not being enough Does it take a sacrifice of blood To gain trust…. Time means nothing If all you have accomplished is doubt So sad my heart,but I will overcome It is the only way, awakening a strength Beyond the understanding of the human mind Jen--->MindBodySoul |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This is very moving... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a fine ‘write’! two ‘tiny points’: line # 2: why not: ‘only I ’? and/or: line # 4: why not: ‘Feeling suddenly tired’? [grammatically and stylistically for concise and max. ‘punch’ (impact)] I always REALLY look forward to hearing this ‘poetic voice’! once again, I was NOT ‘disappointed’ here! applause!! |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
a beauty and kind of sad. have a wonderful day. dear lady |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Sad, but i enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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