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Grinch
Member Elite

since 2005-12-31

Posts 2929
Whoville

0 posted 2007-07-12 07:45 PM

Doomed are the wisdom words
of a prophet shouting at the dead.
As the mumbling brook
pays no heed to the river bed
so too the children feign deafness,
miming penance in pretense.
Both scoundrels and angels at play,
do they listen to the words I say?

Damned are the hopes flung high
upon a buttressed castle walls.
As the squirrel dreams
to catch the oak tree as it falls
so a fool feigns greatness,
offers false claims of deftness.
Both white knight and devils dismay
do they listen to the words I say?

Lost am I who’d leap the moon
and leap a mountain just the same.
As easy as these wasted words
could bring a poets name,
this useless writer witless
bringing paltry lines as witness,
Both fool and child to hide away
who would listen to the words I say?

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2007-07-12 07:53 PM

Me.

This is awesome--you opened with intrigue, and I like intrigue.

You've been missed, Mr. Grinch.

Be well, m'friend.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

2 posted 2007-07-12 08:00 PM

VERY interesting, powerful (and 'thought provoking') write!

I am especially fond of the lead lines:

"Doomed are the wisdom words
of a prophet shouting at the dead (!)"

[this is EXACTLY how I feel...every time I
  attempt what I call 'social impact (or
  social conscience) writes...like my
  "Runaway American Dream" series]

Serious, sustained applause on this piece!!

suthern