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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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he breathed voice into my ear like a gap which peers into deep murky blackness glimmering some unaccustomed infection about to take control snarling visionary exuberance perverse and I I soaking in exchanged compromise as life pushed me away evoking pain of a whole other kind suffering in silence… naked, emaciated curled into a bone-cracking puppet melting every personal thought into dull kelpy brown eyes of the mind you'd give anything for it "not to be true" harrowing denouncement of self worth dark universe smearing slanderous visitations of abyss burping a deep monstorous sea of chronic starvation life as I knew it slowly evaporating into thin air blindsighted by some nature of consciousness sublimital brainwashing silent linguestic void sendiment clicking hisses as it tears away at the flesh of time isolated from family friends alone with no moral support calculating manipulative is this "the end?" for anyone who has been blind sided by the mastery of control [This message has been edited by LeeJ (07-12-2007 07:22 AM).] |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Been there Lee, I understand your heart here!  J. M. Barrie, the playwright, may have said it best when he wrote, “God gave us memories so that we might have roses in December.” |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yikes! I think you need some lovin', girl! ~ and a whole lotta sunshine! Control can be a good thing ~ when it's you that has it! Dang good poem! Giving you an extra big loving hug, Linda |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Awww! Lee! :sqeeze: I've been there, too, boxed and slotted into oblivion at times, and can really realate to this masterful poem. It speaks powerfully, especially to silence, isolation, and loneliness. ~Karen |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
RH, heyyyy good to see you...hope all is well, thanks for stopping by EA...you are indeed an angel...I wrote this for a friend who is presently going thru the confusion and termoil of a cheating and controlling husband...remembering I suppose...trying to encourage her as she is in denial but asking for help...she's a mess... but thanks, I'll take that hug now...smiles Karen, thanks for reading and commenting and for the squeeze...it's so nice to see you hugs |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"suffering in silence… naked, emaciated curled into a bone-cracking puppet melting every personal thought into dull kelpy brown eyes of the mind" LJ: Very impressive the insight you have. It’s almost scary. But that’s you; the ability to see a situation and invoke your understanding into such perfectly formed verses. Your expression here is captivating for minds absorption. JL  What I used to do with one hand tied behind my back now requires every muscle in my body, cohesively. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are one brave lady. You dive deep, m'friend, and this, I am saving. You not only claim your own shadow--but invite others to join. Brava! |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
LOL Thank you... It's good to see you, too! My heart goes out to your friend. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This might be for a friend, but I think you must have known such pain to write it with such emotion, on the other hand I think you have the talent to write about anything It's good to see your picture and your smile. I hope you are well Liz |
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