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Dominique-Simone
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since 2005-11-12
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0 posted 2007-07-10 09:34 PM


Night enormous, hovers me in sleep,
covering my eyes in tar, demanding shallow breath;
I swallow, raspy words emerge,
“I am not ready today.”
Crawling I hide under heavy sheet,
holding knees; I am a torpedo ready to swim
furiously into depths unseen.
With feet ready to walk, I latch onto new day
Sun, covered in gray veils, looks
beyond to moon, while I sob leaves
fallen from last years winter.

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The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
1 posted 2007-07-11 12:27 PM




“I am not ready today.”

the shame is today does not care
and we must carry on

excellent poem Page


Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
2 posted 2007-07-11 06:42 AM


ms page, your nights are the easy part
considering the days
but your pen will conquer them all, enjoyed it ms

Dominique-Simone
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since 2005-11-12
Posts 643

3 posted 2007-07-11 10:15 AM


Thank you Lady and Dark. Your words move me so. Without your comments I wouldn't know for sure if I should write at all.
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