SECOND ENTRY IN MY DEATH JOURNAL

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Open Poetry #40

SECOND ENTRY IN MY DEATH JOURNAL

shirtless
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since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

0 posted 2007-07-10 08:56 PM

last night
I was made awake

the darkness was old

there was a pain
inside me

half of it
was in my arm

half of it
was in my chest

I watched it
like a subway passenger
uncertain
of his station

but in the light
of morning
and the face
of my indifference,
the pain
tired
and snaked off
into a tunnel
so dark
I could not tell
if it was shallow
or eternal

Dominique-Simone
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since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

1 posted 2007-07-10 09:20 PM

This is excellent and brings on so much emotion.

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

2 posted 2007-07-11 03:40 PM

enjoyed the way you've written this one...(not sure I get the title though...)

hugs, g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

3 posted 2007-07-12 09:59 AM

Interesting and thought provoking...the darkness always appears to numb my 'daylight'senses whilst making me even more aware of what might or could be wrong. I could relate to this...

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2007-07-13 05:48 AM

this is my "everynight"

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